Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I had a bicycle as a child.”). Avoid hesitation and incorrect verbs (use “ride” not “write”), and keep sentences short (max 3–4). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g. “because” or “and”) such as where you rode it or who taught you. Focus on natural phrasing and correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it around my neighborhood every evening because there was a large park nearby. It was great exercise and also a fun way to meet friends.

제안: Answer directly and choose clear vocabulary (e.g. “not very popular” rather than “neither popular nor notorious”). Use correct grammar for general statements (use present simple: “use bicycles” not “using”). Provide a specific reason with a linking word (e.g. “because”) and one concrete example or comparison to strengthen the answer. Reduce hesitations and filler words.

예시: I would say bicycles are not very popular nationwide, but they are common in some rural towns. For example, in my hometown many people use bicycles because public transport is infrequent and expensive, so cycling is the most convenient option.

× 'Yes, I did my childhood, uh, I used to write uh, a bike, a bicycle, uh, and it was a great experience because they can be fit all time. Uh, this is a great, uh, physical exercise.'

✓ 'Yes, I did. In my childhood, I used to ride a bicycle, and it was a great experience because it always fit me. It was also great physical exercise.'

'Sentence structure and word choice are incorrect. The original mixes clauses without proper punctuation and uses incorrect verbs (write instead of ride) and pronouns (they instead of it). Also "my childhood" needs preposition in phrase "In my childhood." Suggestion: split into two sentences or use commas appropriately, use the correct verb ride, use singular pronoun it to refer to bicycle, and replace "can be fit all time" with "always fit me" or "fit me well." Use past tense consistently.'

× 'To be honest, uh, it is neither popular or, nor, uh, notorious, but uh, in my hometown, a lot of people uh, using, uh, uh, bicycle, uh, because they cannot use uh, public transportation easily.'

✓ 'To be honest, it is neither popular nor notorious, but in my hometown a lot of people use bicycles because they cannot use public transportation easily.'

'Incorrect verb form and conjunction use. "Using" should be the base verb use to agree with the present simple description. Also the correlative conjunction is "neither...nor" (not "or nor"). Use plural bicycles to match quantifier a lot of people. Suggestion: use simple present "use bicycles" for habitual facts and correct correlative conjunction.'

× 'So they went to ride the bicycle.'

✓ 'So they went to ride bicycles.'

'Past tense verb went is acceptable but the phrase is slightly odd; plural bicycles fits "they." If you mean habitual action in the past, say "So they used to ride bicycles." Suggestion: choose past habitual "used to ride" or keep "went to ride bicycles" with plural form to match subject.'