Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 사용을 정확하게 고치고, 말하려는 의도를 명확히 표현하세요. 예: 과거 사실을 말할 때는 과거형을 사용하고, ‘nervous’ 같은 단어는 상황에 맞지 않습니다. 문장은 간결하게 유지하고 중복을 피하세요. 개선 포인트: 1) 과거형 사용(예: I didn't have a bike). 2) 의미에 맞는 단어 사용(예: I was too nervous to ride / my parents couldn't afford one). 3) 문장 수는 최대 3~4문장으로 하고 주제 문장 + 이유나 한 가지 예시만 덧붙이세요.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was too nervous to ride one on busy streets, so my parents never bought me one. Instead, I usually walked or took the bus to school.

제안: 의견을 명확한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 이유를 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 문법적 오류와 어순을 고치고 시제·기간 표현을 정확히 사용하세요. 개선 포인트: 1) 이유 제시 시 연결어 사용(e.g., because, although, but). 2) 구체적 정보 추가(예: bike lanes, government investment, change over last decade). 3) 불필요한 반복 제거와 문장 완성도를 높이기.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many dedicated bike lanes have been built across cities. However, it wasn't always like this: about ten years ago the infrastructure was much worse, which made cycling inconvenient and unsafe.

× No, I didn't. I have many nervous so I I never, never take a bite. I never have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't. I was very nervous, so I never rode a bike. I never had a bike.

The original contains several issues: incorrect pronoun/word choice and verb tense. 'I have many nervous' is ungrammatical; use 'I was very nervous' (adjective describing state in past). 'I never, never take a bite' seems to be a typo or wrong word choice; 'take a bike' should be 'ride a bike' and because the question refers to childhood (past), use past tense 'rode'. 'I never have a bike' should be past tense 'I never had a bike'. Suggestions: use correct adjectives for feelings (nervous) and consistent past tense verbs when discussing past events; replace incorrect verbs ('take a bite') with the appropriate action verb ('ride').

× Yes, I think because bike bike Rd. is well constructed everywhere, but period the 10 years ago in Korea is very is a very inconven.

✓ Yes, I think so because bike roads are well constructed everywhere now, but ten years ago in Korea they were very inconvenient.

Problems: tense inconsistency and incorrect noun phrases. The student mixed present ('is well constructed') with a poorly formed past time reference ('period the 10 years ago') and awkward adjective use ('inconven'). Correction uses present for current state ('are well constructed') and past for the comparison ('ten years ago they were very inconvenient'). Also 'bike bike Rd.' is corrected to 'bike roads' and subject 'they' inserted to refer to roads. Suggestions: ensure time markers determine verb tense (use past tense with 'ten years ago'), use plural nouns for general statements ('bike roads'), and choose correct adjectives ('inconvenient').