Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, use a clear topic sentence, and provide concise supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and article errors, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–3 sentences. For example, start with a direct statement about having bikes, then add a reason or a brief memory using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”).

예시: Yes, I had two bikes when I was a child: one black and one white. I loved riding them around the city because it made me feel free and excited, so I often spent afternoons exploring my neighborhood.

제안: Answer directly then explain with specific reasons. Use full sentences, correct subject–verb agreement, and clearer linking words (e.g., “however,” “because,” “for example”). Replace vague phrases with specific ones and avoid literal translations. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: It depends on the area, but yes, bikes are quite popular in many parts of the country. For example, in smaller towns and low-income neighborhoods families often own at least one bicycle because it is an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances.

× When I was a younger I had two bikes, one was black one another was white one.

✓ When I was younger I had two bikes: one was black and the other was white.

Use 'younger' without 'a' (adjective vs article). 'Another' is incorrect here; use 'the other' to contrast two items. Also add 'and' to join clauses and a colon or comma for clarity.

× When I use a bike and a go around the city I was so excited because I like.

✓ When I used a bike and went around the city I was so excited because I liked it.

Tense inconsistency: the context is past, so verbs should be past tense ('used', 'went', 'liked'). 'A go' is ungrammatical—use past verb 'went'. Add object 'it' after 'liked' to complete the sentence.

× Depend on the places, but actually yeah.

✓ It depends on the place, but actually, yes.

Sentence needs subject and correct verb form: 'It depends' rather than 'Depend'. Use singular 'place' or plural with matching article. 'Yeah' is informal; 'yes' is more appropriate. Add comma after 'actually' for clarity.

× So the family always have one bike a marriage because it is convenient to go around the city by a bike rather than another transportation.

✓ So each family usually has one bike per household because it is more convenient to travel around the city by bike than by other means of transport.

Subject-verb agreement: 'family' as a singular collective noun takes 'has' not 'have'. 'A marriage' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'per household' or 'per family'. Use 'more convenient' for comparison and 'by bike' (no article) and 'other means of transport' instead of 'another transportation'.