Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, clarity and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses, word choice and sentence structure (e.g., "I had my first bike in the third grade"). Avoid filler sounds and keep responses under five sentences. Be specific about who gave the bike and why.

예시: I had my first bike in the third grade. It was given to me by a neighbour because it was more convenient for me to ride to school. I remember riding it every morning, which saved time and made the trip more enjoyable.

제안: Make your opinion clear with a topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid hesitation. For example, say "Bikes used to be more popular about ten years ago because roads were safer," then contrast with the present using linking words like "however" or "now." Keep to two or three sentences and give concrete details about traffic changes or safety concerns.

예시: Bikes were more popular in my country about ten years ago because roads were quieter and it felt safe for children to ride to school. However, now traffic is much heavier and more chaotic, so many parents prefer to drive their children or use public transport for safety reasons.

× Yes I did, I have the first bite when I was at the 3rd grade.

✓ Yes, I did. I had my first bike when I was in third grade.

Multiple grammar issues: 1) Tense consistency/past tense (ID 5): 'have' should be past 'had' because the action occurred in the past. 2) Article/word choice (ID 22): 'the first bite' is wrong word and article; correct phrase is 'my first bike'. 3) Preposition/article and ordinal (ID 11 and 22): 'at the 3rd grade' should be 'in third grade'. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs for past events, choose correct nouns and articles, and use 'in' with grade levels.

× Uh this is not my family bought it by ourselves.

✓ Uh, my family didn't buy it for me.

Grammar issues: 1) Sentence structure/negation (ID 26 and 5): 'this is not my family bought it by ourselves' is ungrammatical. Use past simple negative 'didn't buy'. 2) Incorrect reflexive/pronoun use (ID 15 and 12): 'by ourselves' is unnecessary and awkward; use 'for me' or omit. Suggestion: Form negative with 'did not' + base verb and use appropriate pronouns.

× They say our other neighbor give it to us for me to more convenient go to school.

✓ They said our neighbor gave it to us so it would be more convenient for me to go to school.

Errors: 1) Past tense (ID 5): 'say' should be past 'said' to match narrative. 2) Subject-verb agreement/past tense (ID 27/5): 'give' should be 'gave'. 3) Incorrect conjunction/structure (ID 16): Use 'so' or 'so that' rather than 'for' here. 4) Incorrect word order and missing prepositions/articles (ID 11 and 26): 'for me to more convenient go to school' should be 'so it would be more convenient for me to go to school'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent, use correct past form, and use 'so that'/'so' + clause with 'for me' and 'to' before verb.

× Yes, it's popular in my countries, but I think it's only popular when around like, uh, ten years ago.

✓ Yes, bikes were popular in my country, but I think they were only popular around ten years ago.

Errors: 1) Singular/plural and article (ID 1 and 22): 'my countries' should be 'my country'. 2) Tense (ID 6/5): Use past 'were' because speaker refers to a past period. 3) Redundancy and incorrect time phrase (ID 26): 'only popular when around like, uh, ten years ago' is awkward; use 'around ten years ago'. 4) Pronoun agreement (ID 27): 'it's' (singular) doesn't match 'bikes'; use 'they' or 'bikes were'. Suggestion: Use consistent nouns and past tense, avoid filler words like 'like, uh' in formal correction.

× Uh, at that time is everything still safe for the kid go to school by themselves?

✓ Uh, at that time, was it still safe for children to go to school by themselves?

Errors: 1) There be issue and word order (ID 3 and 26): 'at that time is everything still safe' should be 'was it still safe' for a past question. 2) Article/pronoun and number (ID 22 and 12): 'the kid' is wrong; use 'children' or 'kids' plural when speaking generally. 3) Infinitive form and reflexive/plural pronoun (ID 8 and 15): 'go' should be 'to go'; 'by themselves' is okay but must match plural subject. Suggestion: Use inversion for questions ('was it'), past tense, and plural forms for general statements.

× But right now it's like, uh, the traffic is so complicated, so parents not dare to let our kid go out by ourselves.

✓ But right now, the traffic is so complicated, so parents don't dare to let their children go out by themselves.

Errors: 1) Present tense and auxiliary (ID 6 and 4): 'parents not dare' is incorrect; use 'parents don't dare' or 'parents are reluctant'. 2) Pronoun and possessive (ID 12): 'our kid' conflicts with 'parents' (use 'their children'). 3) Agreement/reflexive (ID 27 and 15): 'go out by ourselves' should match 'their children' as 'by themselves'. 4) Wordiness/fillers (ID 26): Remove filler 'like, uh' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct negative with do/does, match possessive pronouns, and agree reflexive pronoun with subject.