Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense), avoid fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details joined with linking words. Mention who you rode with and why it was enjoyable. Also correct vocabulary (bike, not bite) and phrase choices (play with, not pay).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it because I loved outdoor activities and it was a good way to exercise. For example, I often rode with my brother and sister to a nearby park every weekend, which made it fun and helped us stay active.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct noun forms and concise language. Avoid hesitation sounds and incomplete thoughts. Mention who uses bikes and why, and contrast with adults using bikes using words like "however" or "on the other hand."

예시: I think bicycles are popular among teenagers in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. However, many adults, especially workers, prefer motorbikes or cars due to longer commutes and comfort. For instance, students often cycle to school, while office workers usually drive.

× Yes, of course, when I was shy when I was young.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was young.

The sentence is redundant and has an extra clause 'when I was shy when I was young' that repeats the time adverbial. Remove the repeated 'when I was' and the adjective 'shy' unless intended. If the student meant to say they were shy, it should be rephrased separately (e.g., 'Yes, of course. I was shy when I was young.'). Keep answers concise and separate distinct ideas into separate sentences.

× I have a bite because umm, I love a lot of outdoor activities.

✓ I had a bike because I loved outdoor activities.

The student used present perfect 'have' and misspelled 'bike' as 'bite'. The question asks about childhood, so past simple tense is appropriate: 'I had a bike.' Also use 'loved' (past simple) to match. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and unnecessary quantifiers such as 'a lot of' without an object; 'outdoor activities' alone is sufficient.

× I have one sister and one brother, so I would like to pay with my brother.

✓ I had one sister and one brother, so I used to play with my brother.

Tense and verb choice are incorrect for past context. 'Have' should be past 'had'. The verb 'pay' is incorrect; likely intended 'play'. Use 'used to play' or 'played' to indicate habitual past action. Ensure pronouns agree and verbs reflect intended meaning.

× Oh well, I think the bike is popular for teenager because umm, and we shouldn't have to pay have to have a bicycle, but in the adult umm about the worker, I think not yet popular because uh.

✓ Oh well, I think bikes are popular with teenagers because many of them don’t need to buy a bicycle. For adults and workers, I think bicycles are not yet very popular.

Multiple issues: noun number and article use ('the bike' -> 'bikes'); noun form ('teenager' -> 'teenagers'); awkward modal phrasing ('we shouldn't have to pay have to have' corrected to 'don’t need to buy'); tense and agreement ('is not yet popular' -> 'are not yet very popular'); word choice and sentence structure improved for clarity. Use consistent subject-verb agreement and plural nouns when speaking generally.