Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and simple sentence structure, avoid hesitations and filler sounds, and give one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, why it was special). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Keep answers concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandparents bought it for me as a present after I recovered from the flu, so I remember it as a special gift.

제안: Make the response more natural and precise. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two brief, specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid conflicting phrases. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because roads are busy and there are few safe bike lanes, so cycling is uncommon for daily travel.

× Yes, I had had a bike when I was a chow uh, which was bought by my grandparents when I was uh, when I have got, when I had got the influenza umm, why I just returned from the hospital they gave me as a present so I will become public.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was bought by my grandparents when I had the flu. They gave it to me as a present after I returned from the hospital.

The original sentence contains multiple tense and word-choice errors and is run-on. Use simple past tense for past events: 'had' (not 'had had') and 'was' for 'child'. 'Chow' is incorrect word choice — should be 'child'. Replace 'have got/ had got' and mixed present perfect with past simple: use 'had the flu' and 'returned'. Break into shorter sentences for clarity. Also 'they gave me as a present' needs an explicit subject 'They gave it to me as a present.' Suggestions: avoid doubling past perfect unless needed, use simple past for sequential past actions, and split into separate sentences to avoid run-on structure.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because everyone use a motor, motorcycle or cars to travel from places to places and in my country there are no places for cycling so that's people travel by bike.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because everyone uses scooters, motorcycles, or cars to travel from place to place, and there are few places for cycling, so people rarely travel by bike.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'everyone' is singular and requires 'uses' (third person singular). 'Motor' is vague; 'scooters' or 'motorbikes' is better. 'Cars' is plural so list items should be parallel. Use idiomatic phrase 'from place to place' (singular) rather than 'from places to places'. 'There are no places for cycling' is absolute; if intended, keep, otherwise 'few places for cycling' is more natural. 'So that's people travel by bike' is ungrammatical; change to 'so people rarely travel by bike.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, maintain parallel structure in lists, use idiomatic expressions, and avoid filler words like 'that's' incorrectly.