Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct tenses, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g. saying you had a bike multiple times) and correct grammar (past tense: had/used). Add a linking word when giving additional detail.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my younger brother, and we used to cycle to the park to hang out with friends.

제안: Begin with a clear position and give specific reasons using correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words (because, however, therefore) and replace unclear words (cyclone) with the intended idea (bike lanes, traffic, or infrastructure). Provide one or two concrete examples to support your view.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic is heavy. For example, cyclists often have to share busy roads with cars, which makes riding unsafe.

× Yes I did when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child.

Missing comma after introductory yes is punctuation rather than grammar; the sentence is otherwise correct past tense. Add a comma to improve clarity.

× I have a bike.

✓ I had a bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). Using present tense 'have' conflicts with the past context. Change to past tense 'had' to match the time reference.

× I use this with my younger brother.

✓ I used it with my younger brother.

Pronoun 'this' is inappropriate for a bike in this context and tense is wrong. Replace 'this' with object pronoun 'it' and change present 'use' to past 'used' to match the child-time frame.

× I used to cycle when I just to hang out with friends.

✓ I used to cycle when I just wanted to hang out with friends.

The pattern 'used to' requires a base verb for habitual past actions; here 'just to hang' is incorrect. Use 'wanted to hang out' to express the reason in past tense. Also maintain parallel past tense.

× No, not sure because here is a really difficult to use bike isn't have any cyclone so it's really dangerous to cycle when I use my country.

✓ No, I'm not sure. It's really difficult to use bikes here because there are no cycle lanes, so it's really dangerous to cycle in my country.

This original contains multiple issues: missing subject and verb ('not sure' needs subject), incorrect word order ('here is a really difficult to use bike'), wrong noun 'cyclone' instead of 'cycle lanes' or 'bike lanes', incorrect verb forms ('isn't have'), and wrong preposition 'when I use my country'. The corrected version provides proper sentence boundaries, subject-verb agreement, correct nouns, and appropriate prepositions to convey the intended meaning clearly.