Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct basic grammar (tense and verb forms), avoid repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'then') correctly to make the sequence clear. Aim for 2–4 sentences and correct past tense forms (brought, rode, used to ride).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for my seventh birthday, and we used to ride together around our neighborhood most evenings, which was a great way to spend time together.

제안: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, article use), sentence structure and cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting points with linking words (for example, 'because', 'also', 'for example'). Use precise vocabulary ('popular', 'form of exercise', 'competitions', 'events') and avoid fragments. Keep to 2–4 well-formed sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and commuting. For example, people often ride in the early morning or evening, and schools and communities regularly organize events such as races and cycling marathons.

× Yes, I had a bike when when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Duplicate word 'when' is a typing/repetition error causing awkwardness; remove the extra 'when' to form a correct past-tense clause.

× I remember my father brought that bike for me on my 7th birthday and I used to rode it around my society with my dad only he also had a bike.

✓ I remember my father bought that bike for me on my 7th birthday, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my dad; he also had a bike.

Use 'bought' instead of 'brought' to indicate purchase (past simple). 'Used to' requires the base form of the verb, so 'rode' should be 'ride'. 'Society' is non-native usage here; 'neighborhood' is more natural. Add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× So we used during the evening time we used to take our bikes and go on a ride together and then we can.

✓ In the evenings, we used to take our bikes and go for a ride together.

The original is redundant and unfinished ('and then we can' is incomplete). 'During the evening time' is wordy; 'In the evenings' is concise. Use 'go for a ride' as the correct collocation and remove the unfinished clause.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people thinks it as an form of exercise and use.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people think of them as a form of exercise and recreation.

'People' is plural, so the verb should be 'think' not 'thinks'. 'Think it as' is incorrect; use 'think of them as'. 'An form' is incorrect article use; use 'a form'. 'Use' is vague; 'recreation' or 'transport' clarifies meaning.

× Go for bike riding in the early in the morning or maybe in the evening.

✓ Many people go bike riding early in the morning or in the evening.

The original is a sentence fragment missing a subject. Add 'Many people' to match the previous sentence and make a full sentence. Remove the extra 'in' after 'early' for correct phrasing.

× They are various competitions also being held in schools like slow bike riding or bike racing or marathons.

✓ There are various competitions held in schools, such as slow bike races, bike races, and marathons.

Start with 'There are' to indicate existence. 'They are various' is incorrect word order. Use 'held' (past participle) to describe events hosted by schools. 'Slow bike riding' is better phrased as 'slow bike races'. Use 'such as' for examples and parallel noun forms.

× There are various events being over.

✓ There are various events taking place.

'Being over' suggests events have finished and is ungrammatical here. Use 'taking place' or 'being held' to indicate events are occurring. This corrects verb phrase selection and meaning.