Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail (reason or consequence). Use correct past tense and pronouns, and limit your response to 2–3 sentences. For example, say you owned a bike, mention how you lost it or why you no longer have it, and finish with a short comment about how you feel or what you did next.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I lost it after it was stolen from outside my school, so I haven't had one since, and I missed riding it with my friends.

제안: Make a clear direct statement first, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Avoid vague phrases like “kind of popular but not.” Give concrete information about who uses bikes, when, and why. Use correct noun-verb agreement and natural expressions for seasons.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially among students and commuters. For example, many people cycle during spring and summer because the weather is pleasant, but usage drops in winter due to rain and cold.

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was when I were a child, when I was a child, but I accidentally lost it and couldn't find it anymore, so now I don't have it.

✓ Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child, but I accidentally lost it and couldn't find it, so now I don't have it.

The sentence contains a past tense subject-verb agreement error 'when I were a child' which should be 'when I was a child'. This is a common past tense form issue: the past tense of 'to be' for first person singular is 'was', not 'were'. Also remove the repeated phrase 'when I was' and the redundant 'anymore' after 'couldn't find it' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I was' for past singular and avoid repetition for concise sentences.

× They are as popular as in other countries and it has it own season to ride it like between the summer and the spring.

✓ Bicycles are as popular as in other countries, and they have their own season for riding, usually between spring and summer.

Several pronoun and noun reference problems: 'They' is vague but acceptable; better to use 'Bicycles'. The phrase 'it has it own season' wrongly uses singular 'it' and incorrect possessive 'it own' instead of 'they have their own'. Also 'between the summer and the spring' uses article and order errors; use 'between spring and summer' or 'from spring to summer'. Suggestion: match plurality (bicycles/they/their), use correct possessive pronouns, and use natural seasonal phrasing.

× So it's kind of popular but not.

✓ So they're somewhat popular, but not overwhelmingly so.

The original is incomplete and unclear: 'it's kind of popular but not' uses 'it' to refer to bicycles (plural) and ends with 'but not' without specifying what it is not. This is a sentence structure and reference issue. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement ('they're') and complete the contrast ('but not overwhelmingly so' or 'but not very much') for clarity.