Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good personal story and specific details (ages, training wheels, color). To improve: make the response more natural by using a concise topic sentence, avoid minor grammatical errors (e.g., pronoun agreement and singular/plural: “I had a bike” not “I did have a bike” is fine, and refer to “it” consistently), and link details with short cohesive phrases. Aim to keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct small mistakes like “He had training wheels” (should be “It had training wheels”) and “my dad brought home two bikes” (spell out numbers).

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. When I was about six or seven, my dad brought home two bikes—one for me and one for my younger brother. It was red and had training wheels, which helped me build confidence, and I later got a bigger bike when I was twelve.

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives examples, but it includes some unclear phrasing and grammar errors that reduce clarity (“back up there” is incorrect, and plural/singular forms need attention). To improve: start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “however”), provide more specific reasons why bikes are unpopular (infrastructure, weather, culture), and correct countable noun forms and word choice. Keep it concise—3–4 sentences—with precise vocabulary (e.g., “delivery workers” instead of “delivery driver”).

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Instead, most people prefer buses or cars because public transport is convenient and roads are crowded. For example, you mainly see bicycles used by delivery workers or some students, rather than as a common mode of travel for everyone.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically correct but unnecessary; simple past 'had' is the normal form for past statements. Use 'I had' for a natural past-tense statement.

× my dad brought home 2 bikes, one for myself and one for my younger brother.

✓ my dad brought home two bikes, one for me and one for my younger brother.

Use 'me' instead of reflexive 'myself' because there is no reflexive action. Also write numbers in words in formal writing and ensure parallel pronoun forms.

× He had training wheels, it was red and it was so beautiful.

✓ It had training wheels; it was red and very beautiful.

Pronoun 'He' incorrectly refers to a bike; replace with 'It'. Also combine clauses with a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity and use 'very beautiful' rather than 'so beautiful' in formal correction.

× Most people use alternative means of transportation like buses and cars or they take long walks.

✓ Most people use alternative means of transportation, like buses and cars, or they walk long distances.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'take long walks' is informal and awkward here; 'walk long distances' fits better. Add commas for clarity.

× You only see a few people using bikes such as delivery driver, food delivery services or students.

✓ You only see a few people using bikes, such as delivery drivers, food delivery couriers, or students.

Mix of singular and plural ('delivery driver' should be plural to match 'a few people'). Also improve parallelism and clarity: use 'couriers' or 'delivery workers' for services.

× So I don't think most people back up there in my country.

✓ So I don't think most people do that in my country.

'Back up there' is unclear and ungrammatical in this context. Replace with 'do that' referring to using bikes, and remove 'there' which is unnecessary. Ensure the pronoun refers clearly to the action mentioned earlier.