Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), correct grammar and use specific details. Mention the type of bike briefly and one reason or memory to enrich the answer. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small balance bike with two training wheels when I was about five, and I loved it because it let me ride around the neighborhood with my friends. Because I was still learning, the extra wheels helped me feel safe and confident.

제안: Avoid hesitation and repetition; give a clear statement about current popularity, then support with a specific reason and a short example. Fix grammar (e.g., “we didn't have”) and finish the thought. Use linking words like “however” or “because” to connect ideas.

예시: Bicycles were more popular when I was a child, but they are less common now because many people prefer motorbikes and smartphones. For example, kids today often stay indoors playing games, whereas when I was young we spent afternoons riding bikes around the park.

× I had a bike when I was a kid. Uh, I liked it very much, but it had, it was like a four Wheeler because 2 was for support, because I was a very young and I didn't know how to ride a bike properly.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid. I liked it very much, but it was like a four-wheeler because two wheels were for support, since I was very young and I didn't know how to ride a bike properly.

Multiple past tense and wording issues: 'had' and 'liked' are correct past forms, but 'it had, it was like a four Wheeler' is awkward and redundant so combine to 'it was like a four-wheeler'. '2' should be written as the word 'two' and the clause about support needs past tense agreement: 'two wheels were for support'. 'because I was a very young' is ungrammatical; remove 'a' and use 'since I was very young' for clarity. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently, avoid redundant fragments, write numbers as words in formal speech, and check article use before adjectives.

× Yeah, uh, the bikes are very popular in our country, but not now. But, uh, when I was a child, it was very popular back then because we didn't had a lot of access to do online activities or entertainment.

✓ Yes, bikes were very popular in our country when I was a child, but they are not as popular now because we didn't have a lot of access to online activities or entertainment.

Tense inconsistency: speaker shifts between present and past incorrectly. 'the bikes are very popular... but not now' is confusing. Use past 'were' for childhood popularity and present 'are not as popular now' for current state. 'didn't had' is incorrect; auxiliary 'did' requires base verb: 'didn't have'. Remove 'to do' after 'access' — use 'access to online activities' or 'access to online entertainment'. Suggestion: decide whether referring to past or present and use correct verb forms; with 'did' always use base form.

× So we had a little bit of entertainment activities. That's why the.

✓ So we had only a few forms of entertainment. That's why we played with bikes a lot.

Original has awkward phrase 'a little bit of entertainment activities' and an incomplete sentence 'That's why the.' Improve noun choice: 'a few forms of entertainment' is clearer. The fragment 'That's why the.' must be completed; infer intended meaning and provide a full clause, e.g. 'That's why we played with bikes a lot.' Suggestion: avoid vague 'activities' with 'entertainment' and ensure every sentence has a subject and verb to avoid fragments.