Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. “pink” not “pink color”), and avoid irrelevant or incorrect details (bikes improve biking skills, not writing). Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I had a small pink bicycle when I was about seven. It was lightweight and had training wheels at first, so I learned to balance quickly. Because I practiced every day, my confidence and riding skills improved a lot.

제안: Answer directly and correct age-group reference (teenagers are not ‘old people’). Use linking words and give a specific example or reason. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. affordable, commuters, students). Keep responses natural and within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and young commuters. For example, many teenagers ride to school because bicycles are affordable and convenient, and they provide regular exercise.

× Yes, when I was a child I used to have a bike that was pink color and I used to love it so much because it helped me improve my skills in biking and writing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to have a bike that was pink in color and I used to love it so much because it helped me improve my biking and riding skills.

The phrase 'pink color' is incorrect; use 'pink in color' or simply 'a pink bike'. Also 'skills in biking and writing' is likely incorrect contextually: 'writing' should be 'riding' (verb confusion). 'Biking' and 'riding' are redundant; use 'biking and riding skills' is repetitive, so 'biking and riding skills' corrected to 'biking and riding' or simply 'riding skills'. Suggestion: say 'a pink bike' or 'a bike that was pink' and replace 'writing' with 'riding' to match context. Suggested improvement: Keep descriptions concise: 'I used to have a pink bike that I loved because it helped me improve my riding skills.'

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country for old people, especially teenagers, because it's cheap and it helps them exercise and improve their riding skills.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country among older people and especially among teenagers, because they are cheap and help people exercise and improve their riding skills.

There is a subject-verb agreement and word choice issue: 'for old people, especially teenagers' is contradictory and awkward; use 'older people' and 'teenagers' as separate groups. 'It's cheap' uses singular 'it' and 'cheap' with a plural subject 'bikes' — this should be 'they are cheap'. Also 'it helps them' should be 'they help people' or 'they help them' matching plural subject. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural verbs and clarify groups: 'bikes are popular among older people and teenagers because they are cheap and help them exercise.'