Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use correct tense and clear sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "No, I didn't have a bike"), then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like "I was a bicycle."

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I used my father's bicycle, and he taught me how to ride it when I was about seven. As a result, I became confident riding on quiet streets near our home.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g. "because", "for example"). Avoid repeating the same adjective and provide one concrete example or statistic to strengthen your answer.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan because they are affordable and practical for daily travel. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work and run errands, and they are common in crowded cities where parking is limited.

× No, I have not a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present perfect/negative form 'have not' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'did not have' for actions or states at a specific past time. Also use the auxiliary 'did' for negation in simple past.

× I was a bicycle when I was a child and my father taught me how to ride a bicycle, how to ride on a bicycle and.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child, and my father taught me how to ride it.

The original 'I was a bicycle' incorrectly uses the subject pronoun; the speaker owned a bicycle, so use 'I had a bicycle'. Repeating 'how to ride a bicycle, how to ride on a bicycle' is redundant; replace with 'how to ride it'. Remove trailing 'and' to complete the sentence.

× Bikes are very affordable and. Affordable. Practical and eco friendly and it's very affordable. It's very convenient.

✓ Bikes are very affordable, practical, and eco-friendly, so they are very convenient.

The original contains sentence fragments, repetition, and punctuation errors. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence: list adjectives with commas and hyphenate 'eco-friendly'. Use a linking phrase 'so they are' to show the result and avoid unnecessary repetition of 'affordable'.

× My country name is Pakistan.

✓ My country's name is Pakistan.

The phrase 'My country name' is not natural English. Use the possessive form 'My country's name' or simply 'I am from Pakistan.' The possessive clarifies that the name belongs to the country.

× Affordable. Practical and eco friendly and it's very affordable.

✓ They are affordable, practical, and eco-friendly, and very convenient.

Fragments and repetition aside, ensure subject-verb agreement: use 'They are' to refer to bikes. List adjectives without standalone fragments. Hyphenate 'eco-friendly' and avoid repeating the same adjective.