Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and conveys personal experience, but it has some language errors, awkward phrasing and slight redundancy. To improve: (1) Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. (2) Correct and simplify vocabulary (e.g., 'jeers' is incorrect; perhaps you meant 'gears' or 'stickers'). (3) Use one or two supporting details with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so') and avoid filler words like 'Yeah'. (4) Keep the response concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave me a small red bike with training wheels, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood almost every day. Because I rode it with my friends, I felt very happy and confident.

제안: Good direct answer with reasons, but improve grammar, vocabulary and cohesion. To improve: (1) Start with a clear topic sentence. (2) Use correct noun forms and articles (e.g., 'bicycles' or 'the bicycle'). (3) Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'firstly' then 'secondly') and expand each reason with a brief specific detail or example. (4) Avoid short fragments; combine ideas into 2–3 polished sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. People often choose bicycles because they are a cheap form of transport and, for example, many commuters cycle to work to save money on fuel. Moreover, cycling is healthy, so families and students often use bikes for exercise and short trips.

× It was more than a red bike with jeers, and I used to ride around the neighborhood almost every day.

✓ It was more than a red bike with gears, and I used to ride around the neighborhood almost every day.

The word 'jeers' is incorrect in context; the intended noun is 'gears', not a verb or present participle. This is a word choice error that affects meaning rather than grammar category, but it involves the present participle/confusion with similar-looking words. Suggestion: use 'gears' for bicycle components. Also ensure vocabulary matches the intended object. Note: This correction keeps tense and sentence structure unchanged.

× I think that nowadays people often use bicycle for many reasons.

✓ I think that nowadays people often use bicycles for many reasons.

The noun 'bicycle' is singular but refers generically to people using them; English requires plural 'bicycles' or the singular with an article ('use a bicycle'). This is a quantifier/number usage issue. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about people in general ('use bicycles') or add an article if referring to one ('use a bicycle').

× Firstly, it's economic transport and 2nd, it's healthy.

✓ Firstly, it's an economical form of transport, and secondly, it's healthy.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'economic transport' and awkward adverbial numbering '2nd'. Classified here under incorrect conjunction/connection and related article/adjective use. Use 'an' before a noun phrase, and 'economical' is the better adjective. Use 'and secondly' to connect items in a list. Suggestion: add appropriate articles ('an'), choose correct adjective ('economical' or 'economical form of transport'), and use 'secondly' rather than '2nd' for formal speech.