Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a short direct answer then add one or two brief supporting details. Use a complete sentence, a time reference or reason, and a linking word if needed. Keep it natural and avoid one-word replies.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my family relied on walking or public transport because we lived in a busy city, so there wasn’t much space to ride.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words to make it coherent. Avoid vague phrases like “everybody” and correct grammatical errors (e.g. verb forms, articles). Keep to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use motorbikes or scooters for commuting because they are faster in traffic and cheaper than cars. Moreover, they save time during rush hour and are easier to park, so many office workers prefer them.

× As this is a modern world, everybody wish to have a bike at home and it saves the time and it helps, it helps to reach the office early.

✓ As this is a modern world, everybody wishes to have a bike at home because it saves time and helps people reach the office early.

The main verb 'wish' must agree with the singular indefinite pronoun 'everybody', so use 'wishes' (third person singular). The phrase 'saves the time' is incorrect; use 'saves time' without the definite article. Repeating 'it helps, it helps' is redundant; combine into 'helps people reach the office early' for clarity and conciseness. Also replace the conjunctions to show cause ('because') and remove unnecessary pronoun 'it' before 'helps'. These changes fix subject-verb agreement, article misuse, redundancy, and improve sentence cohesion.

× As this is a modern world, everybody wish to have a bike at home and it saves the time and it helps, it helps to reach the office early.

✓ As this is a modern world, everybody wishes to have a bike at home because it saves time and helps people reach the office early.

The phrase 'this is a modern world' uses a definite article that is unnatural in this context; better is 'this is a modern world' could be acceptable conversationally but 'the modern world' is more natural if you mean the contemporary era. More importantly, 'the time' in 'saves the time' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'time' without 'the'. Adjusting articles and word choice improves naturalness and grammaticality.