Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence stating your status. Avoid repetition and fill pauses. Add one or two specific supporting details (subject, level, or school name) and use linking words if needed.

예시: I'm a student. I study at [school name] where I attend classes every day to learn subjects like mathematics and computer science. This helps me gain practical skills for my future career.

제안: Start with a direct answer naming the place (school, college). Reduce hesitations and use one or two specific details about facilities or interactions, linked logically (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

예시: I study at [name of school], which has supportive teachers. Because they explain difficult topics clearly, I can ask questions in class and discuss assignments with classmates.

제안: Give a clear opinion (yes or no) and justify it with two specific reasons. Eliminate confusion and filler words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because I can learn many new things that I didn't know before. Also, it has a library where I can find extra materials for my assignments.

제안: Directly answer whether you'd like changes, then explain preferences with specific reasons. If you prefer studying at home, contrast it with school and use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: I would prefer more flexible study options, such as the ability to study at home because it's more comfortable and convenient. For example, I can quickly access information online and complete assignments more efficiently.

제안: Give a clear, specific plan: say what you will study, when, and why. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Use linking words like 'so that' or 'in order to' and include concrete goals (e.g., courses, degrees, skills).

예시: In the future I plan to continue my studies by taking advanced mathematics courses at university so that I can improve my problem-solving skills. I also want to learn practical physics and programming to prepare for a technical career.

× I'm student in, I learn, I study at school and I go to school every day to learn about new knowledge and new skill about my life and it will help me improve my.

✓ I'm a student. I study at school and I go to school every day to learn new things and new skills that will help me improve my life.

The sentence omits the indefinite article 'a' before 'student' and uses awkward phrasing. 'New knowledge and new skill' should be 'new things' or 'new knowledge and new skills'. Also 'improve my.' is incomplete; correct phrasing is 'improve my life.' Suggestions: add the article 'a' before singular countable nouns, use plural for 'skills' when general, and complete the object 'my life'.

× MMM, I'm studying a school where I can learn about new knowledge and I can ask my teacher about uh, what I can don't understand uh, in the class uh, also I can explain with my friend to do my assignment.

✓ I'm studying at a school where I can learn new things and ask my teacher about what I do not understand in class. I can also explain things to my friend when we do assignments together.

Use 'studying at a school' not 'studying a school'. 'What I can don't understand' is incorrect word order and double negative; use 'what I do not understand'. 'Explain with my friend to do my assignment' should be 'explain things to my friend when we do assignments together.' Suggestions: use correct preposition 'at', avoid double negatives, and arrange verbs and objects in natural order.

× Uh, I don't know me as a wolf who's a place to study because, uh, there are, umm, many, uh, thing, uh, I don't know before and uh, I can study new things. Also, uh, there are a library, a library.

✓ I do not know how to describe this place, but there are many things I did not know before and I can learn new things. Also, there is a library.

The original contains confusing metaphor 'me as a wolf' and incorrect articles. Use 'there are many things' (plural) and 'there is a library' (singular, so use 'a' and 'is'). Suggestions: simplify wording, use 'there is' for singular nouns and 'there are' for plural nouns, and ensure noun number matches the article.

× I like to studying at home because it is a comfortable, instant, free for me to study in to study because I can find knowledge about my assignment in Internet and do it effectively.

✓ I like studying at home because it is comfortable and convenient for me; I can find information for my assignments on the Internet and work effectively.

'Like to studying' mixes infinitive and -ing form; use 'like studying' or 'like to study'. 'Instant, free' are awkward; 'convenient' fits better. Use 'information' or 'resources' rather than 'knowledge about my assignment', and 'on the Internet' requires the preposition 'on'. Suggestions: choose correct verb form after 'like', use appropriate adjectives, and use correct prepositions.

× In the in the future, so I am. Studying more? What's the three amount and, uh, improve my skill about, uh, feeling about uh, physical, umm, mathematics and uh.

✓ In the future I plan to study more, improve my skills in subjects like physics and mathematics, and develop other abilities.

The original is fragmented and mixes tenses and unclear phrases. Use 'I plan to' or 'I will' for future intentions. 'What's the three amount' is unclear and should be removed or replaced. Use 'skills in' followed by subject names. Suggestions: use clear future construction ('I plan to' or 'I will'), list subjects clearly, and avoid filler words.