Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct and natural, but very short. Add one brief supporting detail (e.g., what you study or year) to show fluency and provide more information. Keep it to one extra sentence and use a linking phrase such as "I am" or "Currently".

예시: I am a student. Currently, I study hospitality and culinary arts at a local school.

제안: The answer is clear but contains minor grammar and article errors. Use the correct article and preposition: "the Philippines" and capitalisation. Add a short detail about the school (e.g., level or location) to enrich the response using a linking word like "and" or "which".

예시: I study at Aguilar Catholic School in the Philippines, which is a small private secondary school near my neighborhood.

제안: Your opinion is expressed but the language is informal and contains grammar errors (tense, subject-verb agreement, plural/singular, inappropriate words). Avoid insults like "stupid stuffs"; choose constructive phrases. Structure: give a clear topic sentence, then one reason with a specific example. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example". Correct grammar: "they don't teach students well" or "they don't teach me well."

예시: I don't think it's a very good place to study because the teaching methods are not effective; for example, lessons are often rushed and teachers don't explain difficult topics clearly.

제안: You answered positively but repeated phrases and hesitations reduce fluency. Be concise: state the change you want, then give one specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and correct tense/agreement: "teachers don't teach well" or "teachers aren't approachable."

예시: Yes, I would. I wish the school would train teachers to explain lessons more clearly because students struggle to approach teachers and often leave class confused.

제안: Good content and clear goal, but wording and grammar need correction and conciseness. Say the plan directly, correct phrases: "attend a culinary school in Australia," "study for four years," and explain intent to work there. Avoid filler phrases and ask for clarification only if necessary. Use linking words like "and" or "after that."

예시: I plan to attend a culinary school in Australia and study there for about four years to complete my course, and afterwards I hope to gain work experience in the Australian hospitality industry.

× Well, in my own opinion, I guess it's not because they didn't teach the student well like me and sometimes they teaches us some stupid stuffs.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I guess it isn't, because they don't teach students like me well, and sometimes they teach us some stupid things.

Multiple issues: 'in my own opinion' is wordy; use 'in my opinion'. 'it's not' is vague — specify 'it isn't' referring to the school. Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'they didn't teach' (past) conflicts with general complaint — use present 'they don't teach'. 'the student' should be plural 'students' to match general meaning (singular/plural issue). 'teaches' is incorrect with plural subject 'they' (third person singular issue) — use 'teach'. 'stuffs' is uncountable/incorrect plural; use 'things'. Suggestion: simplify and keep consistent present tense for habitual situation, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× For me, I guess yes, because for me it's hard to understand if you didn't know how to approach the teachers and then also the teachers didn't, umm, teach, teach you well.

✓ For me, yes, because it's hard to understand if you don't know how to approach the teachers, and the teachers don't teach you well.

Pronoun and tense issues: repeating 'for me' is redundant. The sentence mixes past 'didn't know' and 'didn't...teach' while describing a general or ongoing problem — use present 'don't know' and 'don't teach'. Also avoid second-person 'you' when speaking about general students; keep generic impersonal or say 'students' if preferred. Remove filler 'umm' and repeated 'teach'. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual problems and consistent pronouns.

× So my future study plans, I'm going to Australia to study a culinary school and then I would stay there like a four years to study my course and also I'm going to work there.

✓ My future study plan is to go to Australia to study at a culinary school, and I will stay there for about four years to complete my course, and I am also going to work there.

Tense and article errors: 'study a culinary school' is wrong — use 'study at a culinary school' (preposition/article). 'I would stay there like a four years' mixes conditional 'would' and informal 'like' and uses incorrect article with 'four years' — use 'will stay' or 'I will stay' and 'for about four years'. Use 'complete my course' for clarity. Ensure future tense consistency (will/am going to). Suggestion: choose one future construction (will or going to), use correct preposition 'at', 'for' with duration, and avoid 'like' as filler.

× I study at Aguilar Catholic school here in Philippines.

✓ I study at Aguilar Catholic School here in the Philippines.

Article and preposition: country names that are plural or official often require 'the' (the Philippines). Also capitalize proper nouns 'School'. Use 'at' is correct for institutions, but add 'the' before 'Philippines'. Suggestion: write 'at Aguilar Catholic School in the Philippines'.