Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and combine related ideas with linking words. Add one specific detail about the kind of hospital or role to make the answer more informative.

예시: I’m a recent nursing graduate and I’m currently looking for a job. Ideally, I’d like to work as a staff nurse at a well‑reputed hospital in my hometown because they offer strong clinical training and opportunities in pediatric care.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence naming the college, avoid repetition, correct word choice (e.g. “graduated from” not “done my graduation”), and clarify abbreviations or programs. Add one or two specific features of the college to support your statement.

예시: I graduated from St. Mary’s College in my hometown, which is well known for its medical programs. For example, I completed a BSc in Nursing there, and the college has strong clinical partnerships with regional hospitals.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples. Use linking words for coherence and correct small grammatical errors (e.g. “teachers who are” not “that are”). Reduce redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, it’s an excellent place to study because the atmosphere is lively and motivating. Moreover, the teachers are supportive and approachable, and the competitive student body encourages everyone to improve academically.

제안: Answer directly, clarify unclear phrases (e.g. “reduce the containers” is confusing), and propose a specific, realistic solution. Use linking words to explain the problem and the suggested action concisely.

예시: Yes. I would change the canteen hours because it’s open all day and many students skip classes to hang out there. For instance, restricting access between 9–11am or setting up monitoring would encourage better attendance.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (e.g. “pursue an MSc abroad”). Give a short, logical sequence of plans and a specific reason or field specialization to make it more convincing.

예시: I recently completed my BSc in Nursing and plan to pursue an MSc abroad in clinical nursing to deepen my practical skills. After that, I hope to do a doctoral degree focusing on pediatric nursing research.

× I am looking forward to find an appropriate job for me.

✓ I am looking forward to finding an appropriate job for me.

The phrase 'looking forward to' must be followed by a noun or a gerund (verb + -ing). Using the base form 'find' is incorrect here. Use 'finding' to create the correct gerund form. Suggestion: Use 'looking forward to' + gerund (e.g., 'looking forward to finding a job').

× I would like to work at a reputed hospital of my hometown because I have done graduation in nursing.

✓ I would like to work at a reputed hospital in my hometown because I graduated in nursing.

Use 'in my hometown' rather than 'of my hometown' to express location. Also, 'have done graduation in nursing' is nonstandard; use the simple past 'graduated in nursing' or 'completed a degree in nursing.' Suggestion: Say 'work at a reputed hospital in my hometown' and 'I graduated in nursing' or 'I completed a degree in nursing.'

× I am a recent graduate and I have done my graduation from one of the College of my hometown.

✓ I am a recent graduate and I completed my degree at one of the colleges in my hometown.

'One of the College' is incorrect: 'college' should be plural 'colleges' and needs the article pattern 'one of the colleges.' 'Have done my graduation' is nonstandard; use 'completed my degree' or 'graduated.' Also use 'at' or 'in' a place. Suggestion: 'completed my degree at one of the colleges in my hometown.'

× It is a highly reputed college having a medical streams.

✓ It is a highly reputed college with medical streams.

'Having a medical streams' is ungrammatical: 'streams' is plural so 'a' is incorrect, and 'having' sounds awkward here. Use 'with medical streams' or 'that offers medical programs.' Suggestion: 'a college with medical streams' or 'a college that offers medical programs.'

× I have done PSC nursing from this college.

✓ I completed PSC nursing at this college.

'Have done PSC nursing' is non-idiomatic. Use 'completed' or 'studied' for finished education. Also use 'at' rather than 'from' to indicate institution. Suggestion: 'I completed PSC nursing at this college.'

× It is widely recognized all over the world.

✓ It is widely recognized around the world.

Original sentence is acceptable but 'all over the world' is idiomatic; 'around the world' is slightly more natural in this context. No tense change needed. Suggestion: Prefer 'recognized around the world.'

× Yes, it is a very good place as it has a very vivacious environment.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place because it has a lively environment.

'Vivacious' typically describes people, not environments. Use 'lively' to describe an environment. Also 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'lively environment.'

× Apart from this, the teachers that are very helpful and very cheerful and the students are also very competitive.

✓ In addition, the teachers are very helpful and cheerful, and the students are also very competitive.

The original has a fragmented relative-clause structure and missing verb for 'teachers.' Use a clear main clause with verbs for both subjects and join with 'and.' Suggestion: Use 'the teachers are...' and join clauses properly.

× So it maintains a sense of competition and help us to learn new things.

✓ So it maintains a sense of competition and helps us learn new things.

Subject 'it' (the college) requires third-person singular verb 'helps' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'help us to learn' is acceptable, but 'helps us learn' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'helps' for third-person singular and omit 'to' after 'help.'

× Yes, I would suggest to reduce the containers as the canteen is open all the time and students from different departments come and sit here regardless of their lecture.

✓ Yes, I would suggest reducing the number of containers because the canteen is open all the time and students from different departments come and sit here regardless of their lectures.

After 'suggest' use the gerund ('reducing') or a that-clause ('I would suggest that they reduce...') rather than 'to reduce.' 'Containers' likely meant 'numbers' or 'tables/seating'; specify 'the number of containers' if intended. Use 'because' for reason and plural 'lectures.' Suggestion: 'I would suggest reducing the number of containers' or 'I would suggest that they reduce...' and use plural 'lectures.'

× They miss the lectures and spend their time there.

✓ They miss their lectures and spend their time there.

Sentence is mostly correct; added 'their' before 'lectures' for clarity and possession. Conjunction 'and' is fine. Suggestion: Include possessive 'their lectures.'

× So actions should be taken among these students so that they can attend their lectures well on time.

✓ So actions should be taken regarding these students so that they can attend their lectures on time.

Use 'regarding' or 'against' rather than 'among' when referring to measures targeting students. 'Well on time' is unidiomatic; use 'on time.' Suggestion: 'actions should be taken regarding these students so that they can attend their lectures on time.'

× I have recently completed my BSc in Nursing and I am looking forward to pursue MSC in abroad as I want to uplift my skills in nursing and then further I want to pursue a doctoral degree.

✓ I have recently completed my BSc in Nursing and I am looking forward to pursuing an MSc abroad because I want to improve my nursing skills and then pursue a doctoral degree.

After 'looking forward to' use gerund 'pursuing.' Use 'MSc' not 'MSC' and drop 'in' before 'abroad' (use 'abroad' alone). 'Uplift my skills' is nonstandard; use 'improve my skills.' Streamline 'then further I want to pursue' to 'and then pursue.' Suggestion: 'looking forward to pursuing an MSc abroad' and 'improve my nursing skills.'