Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要直接且清晰，避免语填充词（例如 "umm","uh"）。句子应表达完整意思并与问题相关，如说明你是学生、学的专业和何时开始学习。注意发音和词汇选择（例如 "I wouldn't" 用法不当，应该是 "I studied" 或 "I started studying"）。

예시: I'm a student. I started studying chemical engineering four years ago, and I'm currently in my third year.

제안: 回答要简洁并且语法正确。先给出地点，然后补充一两句具体信息（例如城市特点或与家乡的距离），使用连词使句子连贯，避免重复。

예시: I study in Wuhan, a beautiful city in Hubei Province. It's quite far from my hometown, so I only go home during long holidays.

제안: 回答要更有条理，先给出总体评价，然后用具体理由支持（如学习资源、教师水平、环境）。减少口语填充词并用连接词（for example, moreover）提高连贯性。注意用词准确（e.g. "people are more professional" 改为 "teachers are more professional" 或 "higher quality staff"）。

예시: Yes, it's a great place to study. The environment is pleasant and there are many qualified teachers, which helps me learn more effectively.

제안: 回答应更具体并提出可行改进。先肯定其优点，再说明具体问题（例如在线平台不稳定），并提出建议（e.g. improve website stability, better IT support）。使用连词使语意流畅，避免模糊表达如 "burned down"（应说 "crashes" 或 "goes down"）。

예시: Yes, I'd like the university to improve its online systems. For example, the course website often crashes during registration, so better server capacity and IT support would help.

제안: 回答应直接说明未来计划并按逻辑展开。先陈述总体目标（e.g. pursue postgraduate study or internships），然后给出具体计划（出国留学、实习、专业方向）。避免无意义填充词和混淆的专业名称，保证句子简洁清楚。

예시: I plan to pursue further studies after graduation, possibly a master's degree abroad. I also want to do more internships to gain practical experience in my field.

× I wouldn't, umm, engineer potulum engineering when I was, uh, four years ago.

✓ I wanted to study engineering when I was four years old.

句子结构混乱且使用了不合适的词（如 wouldn't, engineer potulum）。应使用表过去意愿的短语“wanted to”并加上明确的年龄表达“four years old”。建议：说过去的愿望用‘wanted to + 动词原形’，年龄用‘... years old’。

× I started in Wuhan, which was a beautiful city in Hubei Province is very far away from my hometown of the city.

✓ I started in Wuhan, which is a beautiful city in Hubei Province and is very far away from my hometown.

原句有重复和连接错误，‘which’ 引导的定语从句应该与先行词连贯，且不能再用不完整的短语‘of the city’。建议：使用『which is ... and is ...』来连接描述。

× Of course, it is a very beautiful city, you know, the environment is very good and the fresh air, uh, what's more, the persons are more professional than the cities I lived in.

✓ Of course, it is a very beautiful city. The environment is very good and the air is fresh. What's more, the people are more professional than in the cities I lived in.

原句中形容词/名词使用不当，如 'fresh air' 应与动词连用表达 'the air is fresh'；'persons' 在口语中应为 'people'；比较结构不正确，应为 'more professional than in the cities I lived in'。建议：使用自然的搭配（the air is fresh, people）并用正确的比较结构。

× Of course I think the IT considers and its website.

✓ Of course I think the IT services and their website need improvement.

原句中 'the IT considers' 不符合英语习惯，且冠词和名词搭配错误。应改为 'the IT services' 或 'IT department'，并使用复数或其/他们的 (their) 指代网站。建议：把抽象的 'IT' 具体化为 'IT services' 或 'IT department' 并使用正确的代词。

× You know when I choose some class online and the website is always burned down, I don't like it.

✓ You know when I choose some classes online the website always crashes; I don't like that.

'choose' 与时间事实搭配应使用一般现在时复数 'choose some classes'；'burned down' 用于建筑物着火，不用于网站崩溃，正确表达为 'the website crashes' 或 'the website goes down'。建议：用 'crash' 或 'go down' 描述网站故障，并注意主谓一致与复数形式。

× I think it can be suggested.

✓ I think this should be improved / I would like to suggest improvements.

原句被动且模糊，不符合表达建议的自然说法。应使用主动表达 'I would like to suggest...' 或 'This should be improved'。建议：提出建议时使用明确的主语和动词，如 'I suggest...' 或 'It should be improved.'。

× One long dollar Oh can I tell the professional study was the and porcelain engineering?

✓ Well, my future study plan is to continue studying professional subjects, such as petroleum and chemical engineering.

原句词序混乱，词汇错误（'One long dollar'、'porcelain engineering' 无意义）。根据上下文应为表达将来专业继续深造，可能是 'petroleum engineering' 或其他。建议：先理清想表达的专业名称并用简洁句子表达未来计划。

× I think it's I should try my best to get further studies such as go abroad or to do do more internship.

✓ I think I should try my best to pursue further studies, such as going abroad, or to do more internships.

原句时态与动词形式混用不当，'get further studies' 不地道，应为 'pursue further studies'；并列动词短语需使用动名词形式 'going abroad' 和 'doing more internships' 或不定式保持一致。建议：使用 'pursue further studies' 并在并列结构中保持形式一致（都是动名词或不定式）。