Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the sentence more natural and grammatically correct by using a clear subject-verb structure and a concise phrase for your course of study. Also avoid unnecessary words like 'and' before 'majoring'—use 'major in'.

예시: I’m a postgraduate student majoring in psychology.

제안: Be direct and correct place names; avoid hesitations and repetition. Use one or two clear sentences: state the university and its location, and add a simple detail (e.g., nearby landmark) with a linking phrase.

예시: I study at East China Normal University in Shanghai, which is close to the coast. It’s a large campus near the sea.

제안: Improve grammar (plural nouns, articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words to structure your answer (because, so, also). Give specific supporting details and correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘staff’, ‘beautiful campus’). Avoid unclear phrases like 'delight my wound'.

예시: Yes. I think it’s a great place to study because there are many experienced teachers and motivated students, so I learn a lot from them. The campus is also very pretty, with lots of flowers and green spaces that make studying enjoyable.

제안: Avoid long hesitations and use a clear structure: state your opinion, then give specific suggestions with linking words. Use precise phrases like 'study resources', 'study rooms', or 'equipment'.

예시: I hadn’t thought about it before, but I would welcome a few changes. For example, more study rooms and up-to-date equipment in the library would make it more convenient for students to prepare for exams.

제안: Make grammar and collocation improvements and be concise. Use correct terms like 'language test' and 'academic skills'. Use linking words to show sequence (so, therefore) and be specific about which test or skills if possible.

예시: I plan to study abroad to focus on social psychology. Therefore, I’m preparing for an English language test and improving my academic skills so I’m ready for international study.

× I'm a postgraduate student and majoring in psychology.

✓ I'm a postgraduate student majoring in psychology.

Redundant auxiliary 'and' with 'majoring' causes incorrect present continuous structure; the correct form is to use the present participle as a reduced relative clause or omit 'and'. Use 'majoring in' directly after the noun.

× I started in East China, East China Normal University in Shanghai city.

✓ I study at East China Normal University in Shanghai.

Verb 'started' is wrong context (present study) and preposition 'in' with a university should be 'at'. 'Shanghai city' is redundant; 'Shanghai' is sufficient.

× It is uh is near near sea city.

✓ It is near the sea.

Phrase 'sea city' is unclear and repetitive. Use 'near the sea' with definite article 'the' for a specific sea proximity.

× because there are many experienced teacher and excellent, excellent students, so I can learn a lot from them.

✓ because there are many experienced teachers and excellent students, so I can learn a lot from them.

The noun 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with 'many'. 'Excellent, excellent' is repetitive; one 'excellent' suffices.

× And there are a lot of flowers and prints in school which delight my wound every day.

✓ And there are a lot of flowers and plants on campus that lift my mood every day.

Likely 'prints' and 'wound' are wrong word choices. 'Plants' fits context; 'wound' should be 'mood'. Also use 'on campus' not 'in school', and 'that lift my mood' is natural.

× Umm, actually I don't have idea because I had never thought about these questions.

✓ Umm, actually I don't have an idea because I have never thought about these questions.

Article 'an' is needed with 'idea'. Use present perfect 'have never thought' to indicate up to now; past perfect 'had never' is incorrect without a past reference.

× Umm, I think uh is better to make some change to aid more study equipment or some study room so we are more convenient to study.

✓ Umm, I think it would be better to make some changes to provide more study equipment or study rooms so it is more convenient to study.

Missing subject 'it' and incorrect structure 'is better'. Use conditional 'would be better' for suggestions. 'Aid more study equipment' is incorrect; use 'provide more study equipment'. Pluralize 'changes' and 'study rooms' and correct 'more convenient' placement.

× I plan to study abroad to further study social psychology.

✓ I plan to study abroad to further my study of social psychology.

Redundant 'study' repeated; better phrasing uses 'further my study of'. This keeps future intention clear.

× So now I am prepared for a language text language test and start and improve my academic ability to better suit the foreign study.

✓ So now I am preparing for a language test and working to improve my academic skills to better suit studying abroad.

Use progressive 'preparing' instead of 'prepared' for ongoing action. 'text language language test' is incorrect; 'language test' is correct. 'Start and improve' is awkward; use 'working to improve'. 'the foreign study' should be 'studying abroad'.