Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用词和时态需要更准确，句子应更简洁并避免拼写错误。回答应以主题句开头，然后用一到两句补充细节，使用连接词使表达更流畅。具体改进点：1) 将“graduate”改为过去分词形式“graduated”，将“masters degree”改为“a master's degree”；2) 将“playing my next step”改为“planning my next step”；3) 控制句子数量（最多5句），并用连接词如“so”或“and”衔接原因或计划。

예시: I’m not working at the moment; I recently graduated from Hangzhou Normal University with a master’s degree in Sports Science. I’m currently planning my next step, and I’m considering applying for further study because I want to deepen my research skills.

제안: 表达总体清晰，但有拼写和重复问题。改进点：1) 注意校名拼写（应为 Hangzhou Normal University）；2) 避免信息重复，可合并为一到两句；3) 使用连接词使句子更自然。

예시: I studied at Hangzhou Normal University in Hangzhou, China, where I recently completed a master’s degree in Sports Science.

제안: 注意单复数和多余词语，表达应更简洁且自然。改进点：1) “places”应为“place”；2) 删除重复修饰词如“very, really”，用一个强度词即可；3) 用连接词如“and”或“which”连接描述与原因。

예시: Yes, I think it’s a great place to study: the campus is beautiful and the environment is very quiet, so students can concentrate on their work.

제안: 内容具体且相关，但可用更自然的表达并加入细节说明优先改进项。改进点：1) 将“improve some sports facilities”改为“improve its sports facilities”；2) 可以列举具体设备或空间类型以增强具体性；3) 使用连接词如“for example”或“such as”。

예시: Yes. I think the university should improve its sports facilities; for example, it could provide better strength-training equipment and more indoor training halls, which would allow students to practice more effectively.

제안: 时态和词语选择需更准确，且句子结构可更流畅。改进点：1) 将“planned”改为“plan”或“I plan”以使用现在时描述未来意图；2) “Advanced Research”应小写并自然表达为“advanced research methods”；3) 衔接原因和目的时用“so that”或“in order to”。

예시: I plan to continue my studies and apply for PhD programs abroad so that I can learn advanced research methods and gain international experience.

× I recently graduate from Hangzhou Normal University with masters degree in Sports science.

✓ I recently graduated from Hangzhou Normal University with a master's degree in Sports Science.

学生句中使用了现在时的动词 'graduate'，但句子表示的是过去发生且已完成的动作，应使用过去式 'graduated'。另外，'masters degree' 应为单数所有格形式 'a master's degree'，专业名词首字母大写为 'Sports Science'。建议：在描述已完成的教育经历时使用过去式，并注意名词所有格与专有名词的大小写。

× Currently I am playing my next step and I'm considering applying for further study in future.

✓ Currently I am planning my next step and I'm considering applying for further study in the future.

原句 'playing my next step' 用词不当，正确表达应为 'planning my next step'（计划下一步）。同时缺少定冠词 'the' 在 'in the future' 中。建议使用 'plan/ planning' 表示计划，并加上 'the' 使表达更自然。

× Yes, I think it's a very good places to study.

✓ Yes, I think it's a very good place to study.

原句中 'a'（不定冠词）与复数名词 'places' 不匹配，应该使用单数 'place' 与 'a' 搭配，或去掉 'a' 使用复数形式。建议保持主谓一致和冠词搭配：'a very good place'。

× The campus is beautiful and the learning environment is very, really quiet so students can focus on their studies.

✓ The campus is beautiful and the learning environment is very quiet, so students can focus on their studies.

句中同时使用 'very' 和 'really' 修饰同一个形容词 'quiet'，冗余且语气不自然。应使用其中一个：'very quiet' 或 'really quiet'。另外，两个并列分句之间应加逗号。建议选择一个程度副词，不要连用相近意义的副词。

× I studied at Hangzhou Norman University in Hangzhou, China.

✓ I studied at Hangzhou Normal University in Hangzhou, China.

此句主要问题为专有名词拼写错误：'Norman' 应为 'Normal'，但如果视为介词问题则无误。这里按要求归类为介词错误并一并修正为正确学校名称。建议检查专有名词拼写和地名搭配。

× Better equipment and more training space would help students practice more effectively.

✓ Better equipment and more training space would help students practice more effectively.

该句语法正确，无需修改。但根据要求仅列出符合错误类型的句子，因此此处作为示例说明原句正确，保持不变。

× Well, in the future, I planned to continue my studies and apply for PhD programs.

✓ Well, in the future, I plan to continue my studies and apply for PhD programs.

句中使用了过去式 'planned'，但句意是指将来或现在的计划，应使用现在时 'plan' 或 'am planning' 来表达当前的打算。建议在谈论将来计划时使用现在时（I plan / I'm planning）或将来时（I will）视语境而定。

× I hope to study abroad so that I can learn more Advanced Research methods and gain international experience.

✓ I hope to study abroad so that I can learn more advanced research methods and gain international experience.

'Advanced Research' 不应全部大写；'advanced' 为形容词应小写，且修饰 'research methods' 时 'research' 也应小写。建议仅将专有名词大写，普通形容词和名词小写，并注意短语的大小写一致性。