Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 직접적으로 질문에 답하되 문법 오류(단수/복수, 관사 등)를 고치세요. 불필요한 말버릇(umm, oh no)을 줄이고 간결하게 설명하세요. 추가로 왜 중국에서 공부하는지 짧은 이유를 덧붙여 자연스럽게 확장하세요. 예: 주어와 수식어 순서, 현재 상태 표시에 집중하고 한두 문장으로 마무리하세요.

예시: I am a high school student. I’m Korean, but I’m studying at a high school in China because my family moved here for work.

제안: 답변을 명확히 조직하고 반복을 제거하세요. 이유를 말할 때는 연결어(because, so, as)와 구체적 이유(예: 언어, 문화)를 사용해 두 세 문장으로 간결하게 표현하세요.

예시: I study at a high school in China. I chose China because it is also in Asia and I wanted to improve my Chinese and learn more about Chinese culture.

제안: 의견을 먼저 제시하고 이유나 예시로 뒷받침하세요. 반복과 모호한 표현('precious', 'you receive me') 대신 정확한 형용사와 구체적 이유(교사, 시설, 분위기)를 사용하세요. 최대 2~3문장으로 간단히 정리하세요.

예시: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study because the school has dedicated teachers and a strong academic atmosphere. Most students are very hardworking, which motivates me to study harder.

제안: 질문에 대한 구체적 변경 사항을 하나 또는 두 개 제시하세요(예: 수업 시간, 규칙 완화). 시간 표현을 정확히 하고 모호한 문장을 정돈하세요. 이유와 어떤 효과가 있을지 간단히 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes. I would like the school to start classes later in the morning, because currently we have to be at school by 6:00 AM. Starting later would help students get more sleep and concentrate better.

제안: 목표를 명확히 제시하고 전공 선택 이유와 향후 계획을 연결해서 말하세요. 문법(‘attend a university’, ‘after graduating’)을 고치고 연결어(for example, then)로 흐름을 부드럽게 하세요. 2~3문장으로 구체적인 동기와 계획을 설명하세요.

예시: My plan is to attend a prestigious university in China to study history, especially Chinese history, because I want to understand the country where I’ve been studying. After graduating, I hope to return to Korea and use my knowledge in a career related to history or cultural exchange.

× I am a high school students now.

✓ I am a high school student now.

The noun 'students' is plural but the subject 'I' requires a singular noun. Use singular 'student' to match the singular subject. Suggestion: use 'student' when referring to one person.

× Although I am Korean, I'm studying in a Chinese high school now because Oh no.

✓ Although I am Korean, I'm studying at a Chinese high school now.

The original contains an extraneous phrase 'because Oh no' which is incomplete and disrupts sentence structure. Also use 'at' with 'high school' to indicate location. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fragments and use 'at a Chinese high school'.

× Umm, I study in China, uh, I choose this country because it also, uh, Asian country, also an Asian country and as in Korean and I want to learn and learn.

✓ Umm, I study in China. I chose this country because it is an Asian country like Korea, and I want to learn more.

Use past tense 'chose' for a completed decision. 'Because it also, Asian country' is ungrammatical; use 'it is an Asian country' and 'like Korea' to compare. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense for past choices and 'like' for comparisons.

× I think it is quite good place to study because I'm studying in really precious high school in China.

✓ I think it is a quite good place to study because I'm studying in a very prestigious high school in China.

Missing article 'a' before 'quite good place'. 'Precious' is wrong choice; use 'prestigious' to describe respected schools. Use 'very' instead of 'really' for natural collocation. Suggestion: include proper articles and choose correct adjective.

× In this, uh, high school, uh, the most of students are really, umm, are studying really, uh, you receive me, I would say really.

✓ In this high school, most of the students study very hard, I would say.

Use 'most of the students' (no 'the' before 'most' when referring generally is acceptable but 'most of the students' is natural here). 'Are studying really' is awkward; use 'study very hard'. Remove unclear phrase 'you receive me'. Suggestion: use 'most of the students' and replace redundant words with 'study very hard'.

× The play where I study, uh, China is quite a really, uh, strict country.

✓ The place where I study, in China, is quite strict.

Typo 'play' should be 'place'. 'A really strict country' is odd when referring to location of study; simplify to 'is quite strict' and include 'in China' as prepositional phrase. Remove redundant 'a' before 'really'. Suggestion: correct typos and streamline prepositional phrases.

× I think, uh, we have to go to school in at the morning, six PM, 6:00 AM and I think it is really.

✓ I think we have to go to school in the morning at 6:00 AM, and I think it is too early.

Use 'in the morning' and place 'at 6:00 AM' after it. Remove 'in at' which is incorrect. 'Six PM' conflicts with '6:00 AM' so keep '6:00 AM'. The final clause 'I think it is really' is incomplete; clarify with 'too early'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and provide a complete opinion.

× Uh, my future study plan is to attend to prestigious university in China, and I want to study, uh, history, especially Chinese history in China, Chinese university.

✓ My future study plan is to attend a prestigious university in China, and I want to study history, especially Chinese history, at a Chinese university.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'attend' (attend university does not take 'to'). Add article 'a' before 'prestigious university'. Use 'at' to indicate where you will study history. Suggestion: use 'attend a university' and 'study ... at a university'.

× And after graduated from a Chinese university, I want to go back to Korea.

✓ And after graduating from a Chinese university, I want to go back to Korea.

Use the gerund 'graduating' after 'after' rather than past tense 'graduated'. 'After' should be followed by a noun or gerund. Suggestion: use 'after graduating' to express sequence of events.