Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct, but you can improve it by combining the two sentences into one for a more natural flow and adding a bit more detail to enrich your response.

예시: I'm currently working full-time as a software engineer, which I find both challenging and rewarding.

제안: Your answer is informative and well-structured. To improve, you could use linking words to connect the two parts smoothly and add a brief comment about your experience or the fields you studied.

예시: I completed my undergraduate degree at the University of California, Irvine, and then pursued my Master's degree at Carnegie Mellon University, both of which offered excellent programs in my field.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and natural. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, focus more on academic aspects as well as campus life for a balanced answer.

예시: Yes, both universities are great places to study. In particular, my undergraduate school has a large campus that offers many physical activities, which helped me balance my studies and stay active.

제안: Your answer is detailed but a bit long and slightly repetitive. To improve, try to be more concise, use linking words for coherence, and correct minor grammar issues for naturalness.

예시: Yes, I would like UC Irvine to improve its on-campus shuttle system because the campus is quite large, and currently, students often have to walk long distances or drive between buildings. Enhancing the shuttle service would make commuting much more convenient.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by simplifying some phrases for naturalness.

예시: In the near future, I plan to enroll in several online AI courses because, as a software engineer, I want to transition into AI engineering. Taking these professional courses will help me learn and apply new technologies in the industry.

× I'm a full time worker now.

✓ I'm a full-time worker now.

The phrase 'full time' should be hyphenated to form the compound adjective 'full-time' when describing a noun like 'worker'. This is a common rule in English to clarify that the two words function together as one adjective.

× I studied in the University of California, Irvine for my undergraduate degree and then I went to Carnegie Mellon University for my Masters degree.

✓ I studied at the University of California, Irvine for my undergraduate degree and then I went to Carnegie Mellon University for my master's degree.

The correct preposition to use with institutions like universities is 'at' rather than 'in'. Also, 'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe to indicate possession, and it is lowercase unless part of a formal title.

× I studied in the University of California, Irvine for my undergraduate degree and then I went to Carnegie Mellon University for my Masters degree.

✓ I studied at the University of California, Irvine for my undergraduate degree and then I went to Carnegie Mellon University for my master's degree.

The preposition 'at' is used to indicate attendance at an institution, not 'in'. This is a standard usage in English when referring to places of study.

× Yes, both of my universities are good places to study, especially my undergrad school because the campus is very big and I remember that I enjoyed a lot of physical activities on campus besides study time.

✓ Yes, both of my universities are good places to study, especially my undergrad school because the campus is very big and I remember that I enjoyed a lot of physical activities on campus besides study time.

No grammatical correction needed here for singular/plural issues.

× I enjoyed a lot of physical activities on campus besides study time.

✓ I enjoyed a lot of physical activities on campus besides study time.

The phrase 'besides study time' is acceptable, but 'besides studying time' would be incorrect. No correction needed here.

× for my honor grad university UC Irvine, I would like them to improve the on campus shuttle system because the campus is so big that sometimes students need to walk very long distance, even drive to another class building.

✓ For my honor grad university UC Irvine, I would like them to improve the on-campus shuttle system because the campus is so big that sometimes students need to walk very long distances, even drive to another class building.

'On campus' should be hyphenated as 'on-campus' when used as an adjective. Also, 'distance' should be plural 'distances' because it refers to multiple long walks. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× sometimes students need to walk very long distance, even drive to another class building.

✓ sometimes students need to walk very long distances, even drive to another class building.

The word 'distance' should be plural 'distances' because it refers to multiple instances of long walks, not a single distance.

× even drive to another class building.

✓ even drive to another classroom building.

The phrase 'class building' is awkward; the correct term is 'classroom building' to specify a building with classrooms.

× So if they can improve the shuttle system it will be more convenient for all students.

✓ So if they improve the shuttle system, it will be more convenient for all students.

In conditional sentences, 'if' clauses typically use the simple present tense rather than 'can'. Using 'if they improve' is more grammatically correct and natural than 'if they can improve' in this context.

× In my near future, I plan to register for several online AI courses because as a software engineer, I'm seeking a new path to become an AI engineer in this industry, so I want to take several professional courses to adopt those technologies.

✓ In the near future, I plan to register for several online AI courses because, as a software engineer, I'm seeking a new path to become an AI engineer in this industry, so I want to take several professional courses to adopt those technologies.

The phrase 'in my near future' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in the near future'. Also, a comma is needed after 'because' to separate clauses properly.