Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is informative but slightly long and a bit unclear in structure. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid mixing too many ideas in one sentence to keep it natural and effective.

예시: I am currently a student at a university in London. However, I also work for a Japanese newspaper company based in Tokyo. I came to the UK on a temporary assignment to broaden my perspective.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid listing too many places without clear connections. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary for places and activities.

예시: I study at a university in central London, near the British Museum. I like this location because it allows me to visit cultural sites like museums and churches easily, and there are many restaurants in nearby Soho where I can relax.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit awkward and unclear. Try to express your opinion clearly with a topic sentence, then explain your reasons using linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'one of their ideal places' and be more specific.

예시: Yes, I believe my university is a great place to study, especially for international students. This is because it is located near cultural landmarks like the British Museum, which creates a peaceful and inspiring environment.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clear linking words to connect your ideas and be more precise with vocabulary. Also, keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I would like the university to expand its buildings because it has become very popular, especially among students from developing countries like those in Africa and Asia. As a result, the campus feels crowded, which makes it hard to concentrate.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and by slightly expanding your explanation for clarity. Also, watch for minor grammar issues like article use.

예시: After completing my master's degree, I plan to return to my newspaper company. However, my ultimate goal is to earn a PhD and become a researcher in Japan, so I intend to work at the company for at least five years before pursuing that.

× I came to the UK on temporary assignments and I'm looking forward to building my perspective.

✓ I have come to the UK on temporary assignments and I'm looking forward to building my perspective.

The sentence uses 'I came' which is simple past tense, but the context suggests a recent action with ongoing relevance, so present perfect 'I have come' is more appropriate.

× I prefer the location because I can easily go to the tourist destinations or cultural heritages such as the museum, library or church, and we can easily go to the restaurants in Soho.

✓ I prefer the location because I can easily go to tourist destinations or cultural heritage sites such as museums, libraries or churches, and we can easily go to the restaurants in Soho.

'Tourist destinations' and 'cultural heritage' should be pluralized appropriately. 'Cultural heritages' is incorrect; 'cultural heritage' is usually uncountable or 'heritage sites' is used. Also, 'museum, library or church' should be plural to match the general meaning.

× I prefer the location because I can easily go to the tourist destinations or cultural heritages such as the museum, library or church, and we can easily go to the restaurants in Soho.

✓ I prefer the location because I can easily go to tourist destinations or cultural heritage sites such as museums, libraries or churches, and I can easily go to the restaurants in Soho.

The pronoun 'we' is inconsistent with the speaker's perspective; it should be 'I' to maintain consistency.

× Yes, I think my university is one of their ideal places for concentrating on studying, especially for international students, and that is because the building is surrounded by the British Museum and other heritages.

✓ Yes, I think my university is one of the ideal places for concentrating on studying, especially for international students, and that is because the building is surrounded by the British Museum and other heritage sites.

'Their' is incorrect here because it refers to a third party; 'the' is appropriate. Also, 'other heritages' should be 'other heritage sites' for correct usage.

× Yes, I'd like my universities to expand the buildings compared to nowadays.

✓ Yes, I'd like my university to expand the buildings compared to nowadays.

'Universities' is plural but the speaker refers to their own single university, so it should be singular.

× That is mainly because the university are quite popular, especially among developing countries such as Africa and Asia.

✓ That is mainly because the university is quite popular, especially among developing countries such as those in Africa and Asia.

'University' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'such as Africa and Asia' is vague; 'such as those in Africa and Asia' clarifies meaning.

× It seems that the campus is too crowded for everyone to concentrate on their studying.

✓ It seems that the campus is too crowded for everyone to concentrate on their studies.

'Studying' is a gerund here but 'studies' is more appropriate as a noun referring to academic work.

× I have to go back to my newspaper company after getting my masters degree.

✓ I have to go back to my newspaper company after getting my master's degree.

'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' to indicate possession. The modal verb 'have to' is correctly used here.

× However, my final purpose is getting PhD and becoming a researcher in Japan, so I plan to keep working in the company at least five years.

✓ However, my final purpose is to get a PhD and become a researcher in Japan, so I plan to keep working in the company for at least five years.

After 'is', the infinitive form 'to get' is correct rather than the gerund 'getting'. Also, 'a PhD' needs the article 'a'. 'Becoming' should be 'become' to parallel 'to get'. 'For at least five years' is the correct prepositional phrase.