Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然，表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议简洁明了地表达身份，避免使用“umm”等口语填充词。

예시: I work as an investor, but I am also studying English to improve my skills.

제안: 表达不够准确，语法和用词错误较多。建议直接回答学习地点，并说明学习时间，避免模糊表达。

예시: I study at home every day after work for a couple of hours to improve my English.

제안: 回答不完整且语法错误，句子断裂。建议完整表达观点，并用连词连接句子，使表达连贯。

예시: Yes, I think studying at home is good because no one disturbs me, so I can fully concentrate on my studies.

제안: 回答不完整且表达混乱，语法错误明显。建议完整表达想法，使用连词连接句子，避免句子中断。

예시: If possible, I would like a bigger desk to put my computer and books on it, which would make studying more comfortable.

제안: 表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多。建议简洁明了地表达计划，使用连词使句子更流畅。

예시: I plan to apply to a European university to study medicine because I want to gain more experience abroad.

× I'm working as an investor, umm but now I'm also a student to study out.

✓ I work as an investor, umm but now I'm also a student studying abroad.

这里的“I'm working”用现在进行时不合适，因为职业通常用一般现在时表达。'to study out'表达不正确，应该用动名词短语'studying abroad'表示正在学习且在国外。

× Actually, I study from my own I.

✓ Actually, I study on my own.

'from my own I'结构不正确，正确表达是'on my own'，表示独自学习。

× Every day after work I would study for a couple of day hours to improve my English, such as now.

✓ Every day after work I study for a couple of hours to improve my English, such as now.

'day hours'是错误的复数搭配，应为'couple of hours'表示几个小时。'would study'在此处不合适，改为一般现在时'study'更符合习惯表达。

× Yeah, I think at home it's a very good place to study because. No one could disturb me and I can fully focus on my study. For example, I.

✓ Yeah, I think at home is a very good place to study because no one can disturb me and I can fully focus on my studies.

句子中断句错误，'because.'后不应断句，应与后文连贯。'could'改为'can'表示现在的能力。'my study'应为复数'my studies'表示学习活动。

× If possible, I'd like to change the place where I study. For example, I want a bigger desk so that I can put the computer and my book off on it and also. If there is.

✓ If possible, I'd like to change the place where I study. For example, I want a bigger desk so that I can put the computer and my books on it.

'put ... off on it'是不正确的介词搭配，应为'put ... on it'表示放在桌子上。句子后半部分不完整，应删去。

× I plan to have an application for the European University and the dream major is medicine and so I want to study abroad to see more.

✓ I plan to apply to a European university. My dream major is medicine, so I want to study abroad to see more.

'have an application'用法错误，正确表达是'apply to'某大学。句子结构不清晰，分成两句更通顺。