Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by separating ideas into shorter sentences and adding linking words for better flow. Also, avoid redundancy like 'currently' and 'right now' together.

예시: I'm currently a student. I finished high school a couple of weeks ago, and now I am going to college to study psychiatry.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural by correcting phrases like 'I feel it' and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'maybe' when giving examples.

예시: I usually like studying in my room because the ambience is relaxing and comfortable. However, sometimes I study with a friend at a coffee shop for a change.

제안: Good direct answer with reason. To improve, you can add linking words and more specific details to make your answer richer and more coherent.

예시: Yes, I believe it's a great place to study because there are no distractions. Therefore, I can fully concentrate on my work.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is a bit repetitive and wordy. Try to avoid repeating words like 'maybe' and 'playing'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more concise.

예시: I really like where I study, but I think changing the chairs to more comfortable ones would help students learn better. Also, adding soft background music, such as piano or guitar, could make the place cozier.

제안: Your answer is informative but can be improved by reducing redundancy and using linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. Avoid repeating 'really' and 'maybe'.

예시: I recently finished high school, and I plan to study either psychiatry or psychology. Although I haven't decided yet, I enjoy learning about the human body and helping people understand their feelings, so I am considering one of these fields.

× I'm currently a student, I finished high school a couple weeks ago and right now I'm going to college to study psychiatry.

✓ I'm currently a student. I finished high school a couple of weeks ago and right now I'm going to college to study psychiatry.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence combining two independent clauses with a comma. It should be separated into two sentences or connected properly. Also, 'a couple weeks ago' should be 'a couple of weeks ago' to be grammatically correct.

× I usually like studying in my room because I feel it, the ambience is relaxing and comfortable for me.

✓ I usually like studying in my room because I feel the ambience is relaxing and comfortable for me.

The phrase 'I feel it' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct expression is 'I feel the ambience is relaxing and comfortable for me.' The preposition 'in' is correctly used with 'my room.'

× Yes, I believe it's a great place to study because there's no distraction and I can focus on what I'm currently studying.

✓ Yes, I believe it's a great place to study because there are no distractions and I can focus on what I'm currently studying.

The word 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' because it refers to multiple possible distractions. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun.

× I really like where I study, but I think maybe for a change they can change the chairs to make it more comfortable for the student to to learn.

✓ I really like where I study, but I think maybe for a change they can change the chairs to make it more comfortable for students to learn.

The pronoun 'the student' is incorrect here because it refers to a singular student, but the context implies students in general. It should be plural 'students.' Also, the repeated word 'to' is a typo and should be removed.

× And I think maybe we can put background music like a piano playing or a guitar playing or something like that to make the place more cozy.

✓ And I think maybe we can play background music like piano or guitar to make the place cozier.

The phrase 'put background music like a piano playing or a guitar playing' is awkward. The correct expression is 'play background music like piano or guitar.' Also, 'more cozy' should be 'cozier' as the comparative form of 'cozy.'

× I finished high school recently and now I'm planning to go study maybe psychiatry or psychology.

✓ I finished high school recently and now I'm planning to study maybe psychiatry or psychology.

The phrase 'go study' is informal and awkward here. The correct form is 'planning to study.'

× I really enjoy reading about the human body and I really like helping people to understand their feelings, so I think I'm going to study one of those two.

✓ I really enjoy reading about the human body and I really like helping people understand their feelings, so I think I'm going to study one of those two.

The preposition 'to' before 'understand' is unnecessary. The verb 'help' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to.'