Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới nói về kế hoạch tương lai. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, ví dụ như thiếu mạo từ "a" trước "foreign company" và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác.

예시: I am currently a high school junior. In the future, I want to become a manager in a foreign company. As a student, I am gaining knowledge and experience to prepare for my career.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, "It's locate" nên là "It's located". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh những phần không liên quan như "I can go around and sightseeing" trong lớp học. Hãy tập trung mô tả trường học một cách cụ thể và logic hơn.

예시: I study at a high school located in the city center, which is very convenient for me. The school has modern facilities, especially well-equipped classrooms that create a comfortable learning environment.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "I and my friends" nên là "My friends and I". Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về thư viện hoặc môi trường học tập.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it offers a quiet environment, especially in the library where I can fully concentrate on my tasks. Moreover, my friends and I often go there to relax and prepare for our homework.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "more faster Wi-Fi" nên là "faster Wi-Fi" hoặc "better Wi-Fi". Câu "I discharge my task because of distraction from the Internet" không rõ nghĩa, bạn nên nói rõ ràng hơn về vấn đề gặp phải. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I would like some improvements in my study place, especially better Wi-Fi because sometimes slow internet distracts me and affects my work. Also, having more modern computers would help students study more effectively.

제안: Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, "plan to master in environmental science" nên là "plan to pursue a master's degree in environmental science". Câu cuối "gaining advanced knowledge to environment" nên là "gaining advanced knowledge about the environment". Hãy thêm liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

예시: In the future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in environmental science. I am particularly interested in sustainable development and how we can better protect natural resources. I understand the importance of gaining advanced knowledge about the environment.

× I'm still a high school junior 11th grade, but in the future I want to be a manager in foreign company.

✓ I'm still a high school junior in 11th grade, but in the future I want to be a manager in a foreign company.

The phrase 'foreign company' needs an article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. Also, '11th grade' should be preceded by 'in' to indicate the grade level. This corrects the singular/plural and article usage.

× As a student, I have learned some knowledge and experience so as to prepare for my future job.

✓ As a student, I have learned some knowledge and gained experience to prepare for my future job.

The phrase 'have learned some knowledge and experience' is awkward; 'gained experience' is more natural. Also, 'so as to' is formal and can be simplified to 'to'. This improves clarity and natural usage.

× Well, I'm studying in a high school.

✓ Well, I'm studying at a high school.

The correct preposition for attending an institution is 'at' rather than 'in'. 'At a high school' is the standard expression.

× It's locate in the city center which is very convenient for me.

✓ It's located in the city center, which is very convenient for me.

The verb 'locate' should be in the past participle form 'located' to form the passive voice. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses.

× The facilities here are modern, especially the classroom which I can go around and sightseeing.

✓ The facilities here are modern, especially the classroom where I can walk around and sightsee.

'Which I can go around and sightseeing' is incorrect. 'Where' is used to refer to a place, and 'walk around' and 'sightsee' are the correct verb forms. 'Sightseeing' is a noun or gerund, so 'sightsee' is the verb form needed here.

× Yes, of course I think so because it interests me about a quiet environment, especially a library, which I can completely concentrate on my task.

✓ Yes, of course I think so because I am interested in a quiet environment, especially the library, where I can completely concentrate on my tasks.

'It interests me about' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I am interested in'. Also, 'a library' should be 'the library' if referring to a specific one. 'Which I can completely concentrate on my task' is awkward; 'where I can completely concentrate on my tasks' is better.

× Sometimes I and my friends go here to relax and prepare for the homework.

✓ Sometimes my friends and I go here to relax and prepare for the homework.

The correct order is 'my friends and I' as the subject. Also, 'the homework' is usually uncountable and does not need 'the' unless referring to specific homework.

× Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes, particularly by promoting my study environment.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes, particularly to improve my study environment.

'Promoting my study environment' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to improve my study environment' to express enhancement.

× For example, I want to add more faster Wi-Fi because sometimes I discharge my task because of distraction from the Internet, such as modern computers.

✓ For example, I want to have faster Wi-Fi because sometimes I cannot complete my tasks due to distractions from the Internet, such as using modern computers.

'More faster' is incorrect; 'faster' alone is sufficient. 'Discharge my task' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'complete my tasks'. Also, 'because of distraction' should be 'due to distractions'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× In the future, I plan to master in environmental science.

✓ In the future, I plan to master environmental science.

The verb 'master' does not require the preposition 'in' when followed by a subject. The correct form is 'master environmental science'.

× I realize the importance of gaining advanced knowledge to environment.

✓ I realize the importance of gaining advanced knowledge of the environment.

The phrase 'knowledge to environment' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'of' and 'the environment' needs the definite article 'the'.