Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较为冗长且有重复，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: I am currently working as an English teacher at New Oriental, where I specialize in teaching business writing.

제안: 回答不完整且语句不连贯，缺少清晰的结构和连词。建议完整表达观点，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I study at NYU, which is a great place because I can interact with students from diverse cultural backgrounds.

제안: 回答重复且句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。建议简洁表达观点，使用连接词，并具体说明理由。

예시: Yes, NYU is a good place to study because it has a diverse student body, and the professors are warm and professional, providing excellent support.

제안: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，存在语法错误。建议完整表达想法，注意语法和句子结构。

예시: Yes, I wish NYU had its own exclusive campus in New York City, which would provide more space and a better environment for students.

제안: 回答表达不够流畅，句子结构简单且有语法错误。建议使用更连贯的句子，明确表达学习计划和原因。

예시: In the future, I plan to study for an MBA in China because I want to start my own business and gain knowledge in accounting and finance.

× I taught writing business writing.

✓ I taught business writing.

句子中重复使用了“writing”，造成表达冗余，应去掉重复部分。

× I study in NYU and I think it is a very good place to study because I can communicate with. Students with different cultural background and.

✓ I study at NYU and I think it is a very good place to study because I can communicate with students from different cultural backgrounds.

“study in NYU”应改为“study at NYU”，因为“at”用于表示学校。句子中断句错误，句号后不应有大写“Students”，且“cultural background”应为复数形式“cultural backgrounds”。

× I study in NYU and I think it is a very good place to study because I can communicate with. Students with different cultural background and.

✓ I study at NYU and I think it is a very good place to study because I can communicate with students from different cultural backgrounds.

“study in NYU”中的介词应为“at”，表示在某学校学习。

× Students with different cultural background and.

✓ students with different cultural backgrounds.

“background”应为复数形式“backgrounds”，因为指多个不同的文化背景。

× I think it is a good place to study because people here because I can study with a lot of students with different cultural backgrounds and in addition the professor there is very warm hearted and they are very professional to give a lot.

✓ I think it is a good place to study because I can study with a lot of students from different cultural backgrounds. In addition, the professors there are very warm-hearted and very professional.

句子结构混乱，重复使用“because”，应拆分为两个句子。“people here because”无意义，应删除。教授应为复数“professors”，且“warm hearted”应连写为“warm-hearted”。

× the professor there is very warm hearted and they are very professional to give a lot.

✓ the professors there are very warm-hearted and they are very professional.

“professor”应为复数“professors”，谓语动词也应相应改为“are”。

× Yeah, so take away you for an example, you know it it has no campus.

✓ Yeah, so take YouTube as an example, you know it has no campus.

“take away you”表达错误，应为“take YouTube as an example”。“it it”重复，应删去一个。

× So I think maybe in New York City there can be a campus for NYU exclusively and this will make NYU a more spacious a more.

✓ So I think maybe in New York City there can be a campus exclusively for NYU, and this will make NYU more spacious.

“a campus for NYU exclusively”应改为“a campus exclusively for NYU”，修饰词位置错误。句尾“a more”不完整，应删除。

× Probably in the future I would like to study MBA in China.

✓ Probably in the future, I would like to study for an MBA in China.

“study MBA”应为“study for an MBA”，表示攻读MBA学位。

× Probably in the future I would like to study MBA in China.

✓ Probably in the future, I would like to study for an MBA in China.

“study MBA”缺少介词“for”，正确表达为“study for an MBA”。

× It is because I want to start my own business and become an entrepreneur in the future and study MBA gives me like accounting, finance.

✓ It is because I want to start my own business and become an entrepreneur in the future, and studying for an MBA will give me knowledge in areas like accounting and finance.

句子结构不完整，“study MBA gives me like accounting, finance”表达不清，应改为“studying for an MBA will give me knowledge in areas like accounting and finance”。