Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to improve flow.

예시: I am currently a pre-engineering student at a government college, and I really enjoy my studies there.

제안: Your answer provides good details but is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to be more specific about why you like the library.

예시: I study at a government college which has a great environment. For example, I really enjoy the library because it is calm and peaceful, making it a perfect place to relax or study quietly.

제안: Your answer is somewhat vague and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organise your ideas.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study, especially for students who are motivated and enjoy extracurricular activities. For instance, the college offers various clubs and sports that help students develop their skills.

제안: Your answer shows your opinion but is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly and fully. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid hesitation or repetition.

예시: Yes, I would like the college to add a turf field because although there is a basketball court and football ground, I prefer playing on turf. Additionally, I think expanding the sports facilities would benefit many students.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and organise your ideas logically. Avoid informal language like 'gonna' and use linking words to connect your plans.

예시: After graduating from college, I plan to apply to top universities that specialise in my field. Then, I hope to gain experience by working in entry-level positions before advancing my career.

× I am a college student at the moment and I am studying pre engineering at a government college and I pretty much enjoy that.

✓ I am a college student at the moment, and I am studying pre-engineering at a government college, and I pretty much enjoy it.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and uses 'that' awkwardly. Adding commas improves clarity, and replacing 'that' with 'it' is more natural when referring to the course of study.

× I study in a government college.

✓ I study at a government college.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate when referring to attending an institution. 'In' is less commonly used in this context.

× It is a good college, you can say that, and it really has a good environment.

✓ It is a good college, you could say that, and it really has a good environment.

Using 'could' instead of 'can' is more polite and tentative when expressing opinion. Also, the sentence could be improved with better punctuation, but the main issue is modal verb usage.

× And the and the best thing about my college is the library.

✓ And the best thing about my college is the library.

The phrase 'and the and the' is a repetition error. Removing the extra 'and the' corrects the sentence.

× I love the calmness and peace of that place.

✓ I love the calmness and peace of the place.

Using 'that' is less natural here; 'the place' is more appropriate when referring back to a previously mentioned location.

× I just sometimes go there to sit and do nothing.

✓ I sometimes just go there to sit and do nothing.

The adverb 'just' is better placed before 'go' to improve naturalness and clarity.

× Yeah, you can say that it is a good place to study for a student who is interested, who is actually interested in studying and likes to do some extra curriculars and stuff.

✓ Yeah, you could say that it is a good place to study for a student who is interested, who is actually interested in studying and likes to do some extracurricular activities and stuff.

'Could' is more polite than 'can' when expressing opinion. Also, 'extracurriculars' is informal; 'extracurricular activities' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× So yeah, it is a good place to study. We also they also offer.

✓ So yeah, it is a good place to study. They also offer various activities.

The sentence 'We also they also offer.' is incomplete and confusing. Correcting it to a complete sentence clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I would like to make a lot of changes where I study like they can have a, they can have a turf.

✓ Yes, I would like to make a lot of changes where I study, like having a turf.

The phrase 'they can have a, they can have a turf' is repetitive and awkward. Simplifying it improves clarity.

× Now they do have a basketball court and a football ground, but I like playing turf.

✓ Now they do have a basketball court and a football ground, but I like playing on turf.

The phrase 'playing turf' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'playing on turf.'

× So I would go for that and I would also like to expand.

✓ So I would go for that, and I would also like to expand the facilities.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'expand.' Adding 'the facilities' completes the thought.

× After graduating from college I'm gonna apply for the best universities good for my field and then after graduating by the choice of Allah I am going to apply for some attorney level jobs and then when I got that experience I'm gonna.

✓ After graduating from college, I'm going to apply to the best universities suitable for my field, and then, God willing, I will apply for some entry-level jobs. After gaining that experience, I will...

The original sentence has informal contractions ('gonna'), awkward phrasing ('good for my field'), and incomplete ending. Using 'going to' and 'will' is more appropriate for future plans. 'Attorney level jobs' likely means 'entry-level jobs.' Also, 'by the choice of Allah' is better expressed as 'God willing' in English. The sentence ends abruptly and should be completed for clarity.