Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「studied about Russian policy」ではなく「studied Russian policy」が自然です。また、「one of my best memory」は「one of my best memories」や「a memorable experience」の方が適切です。回答は2文で長すぎず良いですが、内容の明確さと自然さを改善しましょう。

예시: I work at a news agency in Japan, which is one of the most prestigious companies in the country. When I was a student, I studied Russian policy, which was one of my most memorable experiences.

제안: 回答は質問に対して少しずれており、「Where do you study?」には場所を答えるべきです。また、「I study about journalistic things」や「the a coma atmosphere」などの表現は不自然で誤りがあります。場所を明確にし、自然な表現に直しましょう。

예시: I usually study at a cafe near my home because the calm atmosphere helps me concentrate. I focus on topics like politics, social issues, and environmental problems.

제안: 回答は肯定的で理由も述べていますが、「a praise and peaceful」や「the natural sound such as people chatting there」などの表現が不自然です。より自然な形で理由を述べ、文を簡潔にしましょう。

예시: Yes, I prefer studying in a cafe because the atmosphere is calm and peaceful, which helps me concentrate better. I also enjoy the natural background noise, like people chatting.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「The cafe I always study」ではなく「The cafe where I always study」や「I want that cafe to stop it」ではなく「I wish the cafe would ban smoking」が自然です。より正確で自然な表現を心がけましょう。

예시: Yes, I wish the cafe where I always study would ban smoking because it would help me concentrate better.

제안: 回答は明確で内容も適切ですが、「the frequency skills about speaking」などの表現が不自然です。より自然な表現に直し、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I want to study English more deeply because I hope to work abroad in the future. To achieve this, I need to improve my pronunciation and speaking skills, so I plan to work hard.

× When I was a student, I studied about Russian policy, which was one of my best memory.

✓ When I was a student, I studied Russian policy, which was one of my best memories.

The phrase 'studied about' is incorrect; 'study' is a transitive verb and does not require 'about'. Also, 'memory' should be plural 'memories' because it refers to one of multiple experiences.

× I study about journalistic things such as politics, social issues or environmental issues.

✓ I study journalistic things such as politics, social issues, or environmental issues.

The verb 'study' does not require the preposition 'about'. Removing 'about' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× When I have to focus on it, I go to a cafe near my home because the a coma atmosphere makes me focus.

✓ When I have to focus on it, I go to a cafe near my home because the calm atmosphere makes me focus.

The phrase 'the a coma atmosphere' is incorrect. It should be 'the calm atmosphere'. 'A' and 'the' cannot be used together, and 'coma' is a misspelling of 'calm'.

× Yes, I prefer studying in a cafeteria because the atmosphere is a praise and peaceful which makes me concentrate more deeply and I like the natural sound such as people chatting there.

✓ Yes, I prefer studying in a cafeteria because the atmosphere is pleasant and peaceful, which makes me concentrate more deeply, and I like natural sounds such as people chatting there.

The word 'praise' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'pleasant'. Also, 'sound' should be plural 'sounds' to match 'such as people chatting'. Commas are added for clarity.

× The cafe I always study do not prohibit people from smoking, so I want that cafe to stop it so that I can focus more deeply.

✓ The cafe where I always study does not prohibit people from smoking, so I want that cafe to stop it so that I can focus more deeply.

The subject 'The cafe' is singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do'. Also, 'I always study' needs a relative pronoun 'where' to connect properly.

× I want to study English more deeply because I want to work abroad in the future. To do that, I have to improve my pronunciation and the frequency skills about speaking, so I have to work hard.

✓ I want to study English more deeply because I want to work abroad in the future. To do that, I have to improve my pronunciation and speaking fluency skills, so I have to work hard.

The phrase 'the frequency skills about speaking' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'speaking fluency skills' or 'fluency in speaking' to convey the intended meaning.