Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应更自然地表达个人选择的原因，避免显得被动或缺乏自主性，同时回答应简洁明了，避免冗长。

예시: I'm a student who recently graduated in finance from Zhejiang University. I chose this major because I have a strong interest in financial markets and enjoy analyzing economic trends.

제안: 回答应更连贯，避免句子结构混乱，使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时提供具体且相关的细节。

예시: I study at Jiang Shang University, which is located near the Chin Town River in Xiaxia, a small town close to Hangzhou. The campus is surrounded by beautiful scenery, and since there are no tall buildings nearby, we enjoy a wide and open view of the river.

제안: 回答较好，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时丰富细节使表达更具体。

예시: Yes, it's a wonderful place to study because my classmates and teachers are very supportive and always willing to help me with my work. Moreover, the pleasant environment and beautiful surroundings make it easy to concentrate and feel relaxed.

제안: 回答时应避免句子未完成，注意语法和表达完整性，同时提供具体改进建议并用连接词连接观点。

예시: Overall, I think the place where I study is good. However, the canteen food could be improved by offering more affordable prices and a greater variety of dishes, including tasting options. This would encourage students to eat healthier and enjoy their meals more.

제안: 回答应更自然流畅，避免语法错误，使用连接词使句子连贯，同时表达清晰具体。

예시: I plan to pursue postgraduate studies and major in psychology because I feel I have learned enough about finance and want to explore a new field.

× I'm a student and I have just graduated with a major in finance from Zhejiang University and I choose this field because my parents told me to choose this major.

✓ I'm a student and I have just graduated with a major in finance from Zhejiang University and I chose this field because my parents told me to choose this major.

这里的动作发生在过去，应该使用过去时态"chose"，而不是现在时态"choose"。

× I started at the Jiang Shang University, which is located near the Chin Town River in Xiaxia is a small town near Hangzhou, and the campus is surrounded by beautiful scenery, and because there are no tall buildings nearby, we have a wide and open view of the river and.

✓ I started at Jiang Shang University, which is located near the Chin Town River. Xiaxia is a small town near Hangzhou, and the campus is surrounded by beautiful scenery. Because there are no tall buildings nearby, we have a wide and open view of the river.

原句结构混乱，缺少适当的标点和连接词，导致句子难以理解。应拆分为多个句子，使表达更清晰。

× No, I think the place where I study is generally good. However, the food in the canteen could be improved by offering more affordable prices and a great variety of dishes and taster option options. It would be better for the classmates because it would encourage them to eat healthier and.

✓ No, I think the place where I study is generally good. However, the food in the canteen could be improved by offering more affordable prices and a greater variety of dishes and tasting options. It would be better for the classmates because it would encourage them to eat healthier.

句子末尾不完整，"taster option options"重复且用词不当，应改为"tasting options"，并补全句子结尾。

× I plan to have a further study in my post graduate class and I want to major in psychology in the future as I think finance I have learned enough things so I want to change my major to learn something new.

✓ I plan to pursue further study in my postgraduate class and I want to major in psychology in the future as I think I have learned enough about finance, so I want to change my major to learn something new.

"have a further study"表达不自然，应使用"pursue further study"。此外，句子中缺少介词"about"，使表达更准确。