Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "to UN little amount of money." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

예시: I am currently a student, but I also work part-time to earn a small amount of money to cover my expenses.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but contains a pronunciation or word choice error with "repeted" instead of "reputed." Also, "Macquarie Park" is a suburb, not a town, so be precise. Try to add a linking phrase to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I study at Excelsior College, which is one of the most reputed universities in Australia. It is located in Macquarie Park, a suburb of Sydney.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "cultural respective in woman" and "most good places." Try to use simpler, clearer language and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, definitely. The college respects cultural diversity and prioritizes students' autonomy and well-being. Therefore, I believe it is a great place to study because it focuses not only on academics but also on students' overall welfare.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, such as "principles" instead of "principals" and "these tough." Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, explain your suggestions more specifically.

예시: Yes, but only minor changes. The campus is quite crowded, so I have suggested to the principals that they allocate classrooms for specialized classes to reduce congestion.

제안: Your answer is understandable but awkwardly phrased, especially "opportunities to build and on good amount of money." Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: To be honest, I don't have any future study plans. Instead, I plan to focus on my career and seek opportunities to earn a good income to support my future family.

× Basically I'm a student at the moment but I also work part time to UN little amount of money to manage my expenses.

✓ Basically I'm a student at the moment but I also work part time to earn a little amount of money to manage my expenses.

The phrase 'to UN little amount of money' is incorrect. The correct quantifier is 'a little amount of money' to indicate a small quantity. Also, 'UN' seems to be a typo or incorrect word here. The verb 'earn' fits the context of working to get money.

× I study in Excelsior College, which is one of the most repeted universities in Australia.

✓ I study at Excelsior College, which is one of the most reputed universities in Australia.

The correct preposition to use with educational institutions is 'at' rather than 'in'. Also, 'repeted' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'reputed' meaning well-known or respected.

× It is located in Macquarie Park, a town in Sydney.

✓ It is located in Macquarie Park, a suburb of Sydney.

Macquarie Park is a suburb, not a town, and the preposition 'of' is more appropriate than 'in' when describing a suburb belonging to a city.

× Yes definitely becaused the college provides cultural respective in woman to students and also the autonomy and well-being of students are considered there as the priority.

✓ Yes, definitely because the college provides cultural respect to women students and also considers the autonomy and well-being of students as a priority.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. 'Cultural respective in woman' is incorrect; it should be 'cultural respect to women'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by rephrasing for clarity and correctness.

× So I think it is one of the most good places to study in becaused along with academix they focus on the well-being of a student.

✓ So I think it is one of the best places to study because, along with academics, they focus on the well-being of students.

'Most good' is incorrect; the correct superlative form is 'best'. 'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Academix' is a misspelling of 'academics'. Also, 'a student' should be plural 'students' to match the general statement.

× Yes, but not too much. The area of the campus is quite congested, so I prefer giving suggestion to my principles and these tough to allocate the classrooms in more specialist classes.

✓ Yes, but not too much. The area of the campus is quite congested, so I prefer giving suggestions to my principals and they try to allocate the classrooms for more specialized classes.

'Giving suggestion' should be plural 'giving suggestions'. 'Principles' is incorrect; the correct word is 'principals' meaning school leaders. 'These tough' is incorrect; it should be 'they try'. 'In more specialist classes' should be 'for more specialized classes' to indicate purpose.

× To be honest, I don't have any study plans for the future, rather I believe I will go for my career, opportunities to build and on good amount of money for my future generations.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any study plans for the future; rather, I believe I will focus on my career opportunities to build and earn a good amount of money for my future generations.

The phrase 'go for my career, opportunities to build and on good amount of money' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It is corrected to 'focus on my career opportunities to build and earn a good amount of money' to clarify intent and correct verb usage. Also, a semicolon is used to separate the two independent clauses properly.