Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then briefly explain your course. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I'm a student studying Media, Communication and Creative Studies at MCCS. My course mainly focuses on analysing social media platforms like Instagram and documentaries to understand how they represent culture and stereotypes.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect reasons and avoid repetition. Also, clarify your points with specific details.

예시: I study at my campus in the Kowloon Centre, UM. I usually study in the library or common areas because they are peaceful and quiet. Additionally, these places allow me to meet friends and consult lecturers easily.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, avoid irrelevant details and focus on why the place is good for studying.

예시: Yes, I really like my study area because the campus is surrounded by many trees, which creates a calm environment. When I feel stressed, I often take a break and buy my favourite snack, fishballs, to relax.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to express your ideas fully and use correct vocabulary. Provide specific suggestions and explain their benefits clearly.

예시: Yes, I would like the campus to have more green areas, such as parks or gardens. This would be beneficial because it helps reduce eye strain and provides a relaxing environment for students.

제안: Your answer is very unclear and contains many errors. Try to clearly state your future plans in simple sentences. Avoid vague or incorrect words and organise your ideas logically.

예시: I am grateful to have received a conditional offer from Zero XC University. My plan is to prepare myself mentally and academically to face more challenging courses at the university level.

× An mostly the content is about to analyze or to explore how many are like the IG, Instagram or like the documentary to represent the culture or stereo type.

✓ And mostly the content is about analysing or exploring things like IG, Instagram, or documentaries that represent culture or stereotypes.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'An mostly' instead of 'And mostly'. Also, 'about to analyze or to explore' is awkward; the correct form is 'about analysing or exploring'. Additionally, 'how many are like the IG' is unclear; it should be 'things like IG'. 'stereo type' should be one word 'stereotype'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I study it at my campus in the Kowloon Center, UM.

✓ I study at my campus in the Kowloon Centre, UM.

The preposition 'at' is correctly used with 'study', but 'study it at my campus' is incorrect because 'study' here does not take an object 'it'. Removing 'it' corrects the sentence. Also, 'Center' should be 'Centre' in British English.

× Mostly I would study on the library, in the library or the common area because they are peace and quiet and also I can directly to meet my friends and the lecturers and to have some communication and consultation time.

✓ Mostly I study in the library or the common area because they are peaceful and quiet, and I can directly meet my friends and lecturers to have some communication and consultation time.

The preposition 'on the library' is incorrect; it should be 'in the library'. 'Peace and quiet' is a noun phrase; to describe the place, use the adjective 'peaceful and quiet'. 'Can directly to meet' is incorrect; 'to' should be removed after 'can'. These changes correct preposition and verb usage.

× Yes I really like my study area because my school is near so many firsts trees so when I feel very stressful so I would just go down to buy the my favorite snack fishball to reduce my pressure so is quite good for the info.

✓ Yes, I really like my study area because my school is near many fir trees. When I feel very stressed, I just go down to buy my favourite snack, fishballs, to reduce my stress. It is quite good for me.

'Firsts trees' is incorrect; the correct term is 'fir trees'. 'Feel very stressful' should be 'feel very stressed' because 'stressful' describes a situation, not a feeling. 'The my favorite snack fishball' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed and 'fishball' pluralised to 'fishballs'. 'Reduce my pressure' should be 'reduce my stress'. 'So is quite good for the info' is unclear; corrected to 'It is quite good for me' for clarity.

× Yeah, I think if they are the trenches with be benefit for example, it should be increased more green area like the fact she's or even a garden in the campus because it is useful and valuable for my eyes and to reduce my.

✓ Yeah, I think if there were benches, it would be beneficial. For example, the green area should be increased, like the patches or even a garden on campus because it is useful and valuable for my eyes and helps reduce my stress.

'If they are the trenches with be benefit' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'if there were benches, it would be beneficial'. 'It should be increased more green area' is incorrect; the green area should be increased. 'Fact she's' is unclear; likely meant 'patches'. 'In the campus' should be 'on campus'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'to reduce my.' which is incomplete; completed as 'helps reduce my stress' for clarity.

× I'm so grateful to accept a conditional offer from Zero XC.

✓ I'm so grateful to have accepted a conditional offer from Zero XC.

The phrase 'to accept' should be in the perfect infinitive form 'to have accepted' to indicate a completed action relevant to the present.

× So my printing is about you ready, my mood and my sketchy in the universal, my university level to face more difficult word and then the study.

✓ So my plan is about preparing myself, my mood, and my skills at university level to face more difficult work and then study.

'Printing' is incorrect; likely meant 'plan'. 'You ready' should be 'preparing myself'. 'Sketchy' is incorrect; likely meant 'skills'. 'Universal' should be 'university'. 'Word' should be 'work'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.