School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating location, then add one short supporting detail (travel time or neighborhood). Avoid hesitation and unnecessary clauses. Use correct prepositions and plural/singular forms.

예시: My school is in Fujairah city, about a 10–15 minute drive from my house. I live in a nearby small town, so the commute is quite short.

제안: Answer directly with one clear reason, then provide one specific supporting detail or example. Avoid fillers (uh) and repetitive phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I don't like my current school because I miss my old one. For example, I was closer to my friends there and felt happier and more motivated to learn.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific reasons with examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: No, I don't think it's a good place to study because the teaching methods are unclear. For example, the English lessons lack structure and teachers rarely explain grammar or give useful practice.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the environment, then add one specific detail or example. Avoid vague phrasing and disrespectful comments; be neutral and precise. Remove hesitations and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: The school environment is quite crowded and noisy, which makes it hard to concentrate. For instance, there are many students in the corridors and classrooms, so I often feel uncomfortable.

제안: Answer directly about importance, then relate it to yourself with one specific example. Avoid self-deprecating labels; instead explain behaviour changes and reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and keep it concise.

예시: Interest in study is very important because it helps you focus and learn effectively. I used to be motivated and prepared for exams, but recently I haven't been studying as regularly, so my progress has slowed.

× My school is not far from my house, it is approximately 15 or 10 minutes and it is located in Fujairah which is in the city and I live in small town which is where.

✓ My school is not far from my house; it is approximately 10 to 15 minutes away and is located in Fujairah, which is a city, while I live in a small town nearby.

Errors: incorrect preposition and word order for time ('15 or 10 minutes' -> '10 to 15 minutes'), missing preposition 'away' for distance, incorrect article usage ('a small town'), and awkward clause order. Suggestion: use '10 to 15 minutes' for a range, add 'away' after minutes to show distance, use articles ('a city', 'a small town'), and restructure clauses for clarity.

× I don't like my school because I prefer my old school, my old, uh, personality, my old behavior, my older friends. I was very happy there and excited.

✓ I don't like my current school because I prefer my old school, my former personality and behavior, and my older friends. I was very happy and excited there.

Errors: repetitive and unclear use of 'old' and pronoun reference 'my old' without clear nouns. 'Older friends' can imply age comparison; 'former' clarifies past. Suggestion: replace vague repeats with precise nouns ('former personality and behavior'), keep parallel structure in lists, and place 'there' after 'happy and excited'.

× I don't think so because the teacher they are not teaching in a good way and they we studied English since grade one or KG one.

✓ I don't think so because the teachers are not teaching well, and we have been studying English since Kindergarten or Grade One.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('the teacher they are' should be 'the teachers are'), incorrect adverb choice ('in a good way' -> 'well'), and tense aspect for ongoing study ('we studied' -> 'we have been studying' since a past point until now). Suggestion: make subject and verb agree, use 'well' for teaching quality, and use present perfect continuous or present perfect to show duration.

× I mean sorry but I really don't see like they are teaching us in a good way like the method is not clear.

✓ I mean, sorry, but I really don't think they are teaching us well; the method is not clear.

Errors: awkward pronoun use and filler words ('see like they are' unclear). Use 'think' instead of 'see' for opinion, 'well' for adverb, and separate clauses with punctuation. Suggestion: simplify to 'I don't think they are teaching us well' and state the reason 'the method is not clear'.

× They are very like, it's like a crowded school and not respectful girls You will see there.

✓ It is a very crowded school, and you will see many disrespectful girls there.

Errors: incorrect pronoun 'They are' referring to 'school' (use 'It is'), awkward filler 'it's like', wrong word order 'not respectful girls You will see there'. Suggestion: refer to 'school' with 'it', remove fillers, use 'many' to quantify, and put 'there' at end.

× And I know I'm not feeling uh, comfortable right now, but I will graduate in only one month, yes.

✓ I know I'm not feeling comfortable right now, but I will graduate in only one month.

Errors: unnecessary filler and awkward pronoun placement 'I know I'm not feeling uh, comfortable'. Remove fillers and trailing 'yes'. Suggestion: keep sentence concise: 'I know I'm not feeling comfortable right now, but I will graduate in only one month.'

× For me, I am a very lazy person and I'm quite in this class at school and before I was very interested and I study well, I concentrate and prepared well, but right now I'm not the person I was, so no.

✓ For me, I am a very lazy person in this class at school. Before, I was very interested and studied well; I used to concentrate and prepare thoroughly, but right now I'm not the person I was, so no.

Errors: run-on sentence, inconsistent tense usage ('I study well' present vs 'prepared' past), and awkward phrasing 'I'm quite in this class'. Suggestion: split into sentences, maintain consistent past tense when referring to past habits ('I studied', 'I used to concentrate and prepare'), and use clear connectors ('before', 'but').