School— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence giving location, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and long phrases (e.g., "central region of eastern part"). Use correct article forms and plural agreement.

예시: My school is City Girls Secondary School, located on the eastern side of the university campus. It is a government-run school known for strict discipline and consistently high exam results.

제안: Answer directly with a clear reason statement, use correct grammar (e.g., "experienced teachers"), and avoid vague or run-on sentences. Give one or two specific reasons linked with connecting words like "because" or "also."

예시: Yes, I love my school because the teachers are very experienced and supportive. For example, they offer extra help after class, which helps students improve their grades.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and remove fillers ("uh", repeated words). Use correct collocations ("high academic standards", "explain things clearly") and one concrete example of how teachers help students.

예시: Yes, I think it is an excellent place to study because it maintains high academic standards and has experienced teachers. For instance, teachers explain lessons clearly and offer practical examples, which helps students understand difficult topics.

제안: Give a cohesive description: start with overall impression, then add specific, well-connected details. Correct grammar ("sandy soil", "allows students to play safely"). Avoid incomplete sentences and vague words like "ambient" without explanation.

예시: The school has a pleasant, green environment with many trees and flower beds. The playground has sandy soil, which makes it safer for students to run and play without getting hurt.

제안: Clarify your main point: avoid contradictory words like "unnecessary and important." State a clear opinion about interest in study and give specific reasons or examples. Use correct articles and plural forms ("these teachers").

예시: Interest in studying is very important because it motivates students to learn and improve. For example, motivated students at my school are more likely to attend extra classes and ask teachers for help, which boosts their results.

× My school is located in the central region of eastern part of Nigerian University.

✓ My school is located in the central region in the eastern part of Nigeria.

The definite article and noun forms are used incorrectly. 'Nigerian University' is not appropriate here; likely intended country name 'Nigeria'. Use 'the eastern part of Nigeria' or 'the eastern region of Nigeria'. Also include a preposition 'in' before 'the eastern part'. Ensure proper noun form for country.

× It is one of the popular government school known as City Girls Secondary School.

✓ It is one of the popular government schools known as City Girls Secondary School.

Plural form is required after 'one of the' so 'school' should be 'schools'. Also 'government schools' needs plural agreement. Keep 'known as' which is correct.

× My school is well known because they teach very well, they discipline students and they have excellent academic performance.

✓ My school is well known because it teaches very well, disciplines students, and has excellent academic performance.

School is a singular noun that should be referred to with singular pronoun 'it' and singular verb forms. Use parallel verb forms and remove repeated pronouns. Also 'have excellent academic performance' should be 'has excellent academic performance' to agree with singular subject.

× Yes, I love my school because they have an experienced teachers and they perform very well in terms of academic and my school knows how to discipline children when it comes to teaching a child what to know and.

✓ Yes, I love my school because it has experienced teachers and it performs very well academically, and my school knows how to discipline children when it comes to teaching them what they need to know.

Use singular pronoun 'it' for 'school' and matching verb forms. 'An experienced teachers' is wrong: remove article 'an' and use plural 'experienced teachers' or singular 'an experienced teacher'. 'Perform very well in terms of academic' should be 'performs very well academically'. Fix the clause 'teaching a child what to know' to 'teaching them what they need to know' for clarity and correct pronouns.

× Yeah, my school is yes, my school is a very nice place to study because they have a high standard academic, uh, academic excellence and experienced teacher.

✓ Yes, my school is a very nice place to study because it has a high standard of academics, academic excellence, and experienced teachers.

Use 'it' for the singular noun 'school' and 'has' for third person singular. Use 'a high standard of academics' or 'high academic standards'. 'Experienced teacher' should be plural to match 'teachers' or use 'an experienced teacher' if singular.

× The teachers there always explain things clarity to students and this makes students to perform very well academia.

✓ The teachers there always explain things clearly to students, and this helps students perform very well academically.

Use adverb 'clearly' rather than noun 'clarity'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'makes students'. 'Academia' is used incorrectly; use 'academically'. Maintain parallel structure and correct word forms.

× My school environment has a lot of trees and flowers. It is. It has a sand. It is a sandy soil which makes people to play very well without sustaining injury when they fall. The environment is so ambient in the sense that one can.

✓ The school environment has many trees and flowers. It has sandy soil, which allows people to play safely without sustaining injuries when they fall. The environment is pleasant and peaceful.

Fragmented sentences and incorrect articles ('a sand') need correction. Use 'many trees' not 'a lot of' for formality, 'sandy soil' rather than 'a sand'. Remove 'to' after 'makes people' and use plural 'injuries'. 'Ambient' is misused; 'pleasant and peaceful' conveys intended meaning. Complete the final fragment.

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

Use gerund 'studying' after 'interest in' to form correct noun phrase. 'Interest in study' is understandable but 'interest in studying' is more natural.

× It is very unnecessary and important to study in my school because my school is one of the standard academic school with very very high academic performance and this teachers there are very supportive.

✓ It is very important to study at my school because my school is a standard academic institution with very high academic performance, and the teachers there are very supportive.

Remove contradictory 'unnecessary and important'. Use 'important' only. Use preposition 'at my school' not 'in'. 'One of the standard academic school' needs plural or rephrasing: 'a standard academic institution' or 'one of the standard academic schools'. Remove duplicate 'very'. Use 'the teachers' and correct article use.

× They understand every student and teach them according to their capabilities.

✓ They understand each student and teach them according to their capabilities.

Original is mostly correct; change 'every student' to 'each student' for slight improvement in formality. Pronouns 'them' and 'their' correctly refer to 'each student' in modern usage.