Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives relevant details (job, travel, purpose). To improve, make the response more concise and fluent: avoid filler words (e.g., "yeah"), correct small grammar issues ("after flight" → "after flights" or "after a flight"; "I sent them" → "I save them" or "I send them to friends"), and limit to around 3–4 sentences. Add a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail and an example. Use linking words like "because" and "so" appropriately.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel for work. As a cabin crew member, I visit many countries, so I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember the trips. I usually review the photos after flights and save my favourites to a travel album.

제안: Good structure: you answer directly and provide reasons. Improve by correcting grammar ("it has different beautiful views" → "they offer different kinds of beauty"; "different atmosphere" → "different atmospheres"). Combine sentences for fluency and add a brief example to be specific. Use linking words like "however" or "because" to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I like both urban and rural views because they offer different kinds of beauty and atmospheres. However, I usually prefer urban views because I feel more comfortable in busy places and I enjoy photographing modern architecture, such as glass towers and crowded streets.

제안: Your answer is relevant and conveys a clear preference, but the grammar and phrasing need polishing ("I see the view in my country every time" → "I see the scenery in my country often"; "after I left there" → "after I leave" or "after I come home"). Avoid redundancy ("I want to remember them… so it's more useful"). Add a brief specific example of what you photograph abroad to enrich content.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I often see my home country's scenery, so foreign places feel more special. For example, when I visit Japan I photograph traditional temples and street scenes to remember the trip after I return home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially at the holidays, because I'm a cabin crew member and I, yeah, I'm flying to other countries continuously.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially on holidays, because I'm a cabin crew member and I often fly to other countries.

Use 'on holidays' or simply 'at the holidays' is incorrect in this context; 'on holidays' or 'during the holidays' is correct for speaking about holiday periods. Also 'I'm flying to other countries continuously' is awkward and uses present continuous unnecessarily; 'I often fly to other countries' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'on holidays' and simple present 'I often fly' to describe habitual actions. Grammar problem types involved: 22 (Article errors) and 6 (Present tense issue). Only corrected per list: changed preposition/ article phrase and tense to present simple for habitual action.

× So I take a lot of pictures in other countries and I look at them after flight as a memory and I sent them.

✓ So I take a lot of pictures in other countries, I look at them after the flight as memories, and I send them.

Mixed tenses: 'I sent them' is past tense but the context describes a habitual action, so use present simple 'I send them'. Also add article 'the' before 'flight' and plural 'memories' fits better. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habitual actions and use correct articles and plural nouns.

× I prefer both areas because it has different beautiful views and different atmosphere.

✓ I prefer both areas because they have different beautiful views and different atmospheres.

Pronoun-verb agreement: 'it has' incorrectly refers to 'both areas' (plural). Use 'they have'. Also 'different atmosphere' should be plural 'different atmospheres' or 'different atmospheres and scenery'. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb and nouns.

× It depends on my mood actually.

✓ It actually depends on my mood.

Word order and adverb placement: 'actually' is better placed before the verb phrase. The tense is acceptable (present simple). Suggestion: move 'actually' to natural position: 'It actually depends on my mood.'

× But to be honest I usually prefer views in urban areas because I feel more comfortable.

✓ But to be honest, I usually prefer views in urban areas because I feel more comfortable there.

Missing adverbial 'there' at end improves clarity. Tense and agreement are correct. Suggestion: add 'there' to indicate location and include a comma after introductory phrase.

× I prefer views in other countries because I see the view in my country every time, but when I go to other countries I want to remember them after I left there, so it's more useful for me.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I see the views in my country all the time, and when I go to other countries I want to remember them after I leave, so it's more meaningful for me.

Tense consistency: 'after I left there' is past tense and mismatches the present preference; use 'after I leave'. Use present simple 'see the views... all the time' for habitual action. 'Useful' is odd here; 'meaningful' or 'valuable' fits better. Suggestion: keep present simple for habitual actions and ensure tense consistency across clauses.