Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và độ rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'charred memories' sai nghĩa) và câu lặp, dùng câu mở đầu rõ ràng trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Sắp xếp lại ý theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ + kết luận ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'when') để câu mạch lạc. Ví dụ cụ thể: nói khi nào bạn chụp, loại cảnh bạn thích và cảm xúc khi xem lại ảnh.

예시: Yes, I do. I love taking photos of beautiful landscapes when I travel because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often take pictures at sunset or on mountain tops, and looking at those photos later makes me feel like I’m back there. This helps me relive the experience and share it with friends.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp hơn (câu chủ đề rõ ràng) và khắc phục lỗi ngắt quãng, ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'share it moments'). Sử dụng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ cụ thể, kèm liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh các câu thừa và không rõ nghĩa như 'as an interested person, I ask.' Hãy nêu ví dụ cụ thể về một cảnh ở thành phố hoặc nông thôn và lý do bạn thích nó.

예시: I don't have a strong preference between urban and rural views. What matters more to me is the atmosphere — I enjoy lively city skylines when I’m with friends, and peaceful countryside views when I want to relax. For instance, I like walking along a riverside in a small town because it feels calm and allows good conversations.

제안: Cần tránh lặp lại câu trả lời trước và sửa lỗi cú pháp/ngắt câu (ví dụ 'or. Members', 'daily immersing'). Trả lời trực tiếp: nêu rõ bạn thích trong nước hay nước ngoài rồi giải thích với chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ để nối ý và thêm một ví dụ thực tế (như một địa điểm trong nước hoặc nước ngoài) để minh họa.

예시: I don’t mind whether a view is in my country or abroad; I care more about the experience. For example, seeing the coastline in my country with family feels familiar and comforting, while visiting famous viewpoints abroad can be exciting because I discover new cultures. Either way, I enjoy sharing these moments with close friends.

× The years, definitely.

✓ The years, definitely is unclear; rewrite as 'Definitely, I do.'

The original is a fragment and lacks a clear subject and verb. It should be a complete response to the question. Suggestion: say 'Definitely, I do.' or 'Yes, definitely.' to form a full sentence.

× While I'm fascinated by experience every moment during my travels, I'm particularly fond of taking photographs of beautiful views and great guests to reserve them as charred memories.

✓ While I'm fascinated by experiencing every moment during my travels, I'm particularly fond of taking photographs of beautiful views and special moments to preserve them as cherished memories.

Use the gerund 'experiencing' after 'fascinated by' (follows verb+preposition pattern). 'Great guests' and 'charred memories' are incorrect word choices; use 'special moments' and 'cherished memories'. Also use 'preserve' instead of 'reserve' for retaining memories.

× Particularly whenever I look back at those photos, it seems that I am traveling back in time, allowing me to truly relieve those wonderful experiences.

✓ Particularly whenever I look back at those photos, it seems that I am traveling back in time, allowing me to truly relive those wonderful experiences.

The verb 'relieve' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'relive' meaning to experience again. The rest of the sentence structure is acceptable.

× Is once again.

✓ I feel like I'm there once again.

'Is once again' is a fragment with no subject. Complete the sentence with a subject and verb, e.g., 'I feel like I'm there once again.'.

× It largely depends on whether I enjoy the view or not.

✓ It largely depends on whether I enjoy the view or not.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× To be honest, I'm not particularly concerned about whether the scenery is located in an urban or rural area.

✓ To be honest, I'm not particularly concerned about whether the scenery is in an urban or rural area.

'Located' is unnecessary here; using 'is in' is more natural but original is acceptable. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar error.

× Instead, I tend to value the experience associated with it.

✓ Instead, I tend to value the experience associated with the view.

The pronoun 'it' is vague; specifying 'the view' clarifies the referent and improves sentence clarity.

× For example, I genuinely enjoy views shared with a small group of close friends.

✓ For example, I genuinely enjoy views shared with a small group of close friends.

This sentence is correct as written. (Included for completeness.)

× Or family members as they allow me to share it moments while truly immersing myself in the experience.

✓ Or with family members, as they allow me to share moments while truly immersing myself in the experience.

Sentence fragment beginning with 'Or' should be connected to the previous sentence; remove 'it' (incorrect) and add 'with' before 'family members' to be grammatical.

× However, as an interested person, I ask.

✓ However, as someone who is interested, I enjoy those experiences.

'As an interested person, I ask' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'someone who is interested' and a clear verb like 'enjoy' to convey meaning.

× It largely depends on whether I enjoy the view or not, to be honest and not particularly concerned about whether the scenery is located in my country or other countries.

✓ It largely depends on whether I enjoy the view or not; to be honest, I'm not particularly concerned about whether the scenery is located in my country or in other countries.

Run-on and missing subject in second clause. Add 'I'm' to make the clause complete and insert a semicolon or period. Also add 'in' before 'other countries' for parallel structure.

× Instead, I tend to value the experience associated with it.

✓ Instead, I tend to value the experience associated with it.

This repeats an earlier sentence and is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× For example, I genuinely enjoy views shared with a small group of close friends or.

✓ For example, I genuinely enjoy views shared with a small group of close friends or family members.

Sentence is incomplete and ends with 'or.' Add 'family members' to complete the contrast.

× Members as they allow me to share great moments while daily immersing myself in the experience.

✓ Family members, as they allow me to share great moments while fully immersing myself in the experience.

Fragment 'Members as...' should be connected to previous clause. 'Daily immersing' is awkward; use 'fully immersing' for intended meaning.

× However, as an interesting person, I also value enjoying beautiful.

✓ However, as someone who is interested in exploring, I also enjoy beautiful scenery.

'As an interesting person' is incorrect; use 'someone who is interested' or 'someone interested in exploring'. 'Value enjoying beautiful' is ungrammatical—replace with 'enjoy beautiful scenery'.