Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, correct collocation errors, and limit to about 2–3 sentences. Replace vague phrase “notice details I would otherwise meet” with a clearer expression such as “miss” or “overlook.”

예시: Yes — I enjoy photographing landscapes and small scenes around my neighborhood. It helps me notice details I would otherwise miss, like textures and light, and makes my walks more interesting.

제안: Improve grammar, word choice and coherence. State your preference directly, use correct collocations (e.g., “I prefer rural areas”), and give one clear supporting detail with linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and unclear fragments such as “helps me and wide.”

예시: I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery and wildlife help me relax. For example, after a busy week in the city I often take long walks through quiet fields or forests, which clear my mind and lower my stress.

제안: Good content and clear preference. Improve fluency by tightening sentences and correcting small grammar issues (use hyphens for compound adjectives like “tree-covered” and add “century-old” with hyphen). Add a linking phrase to connect the example to the main idea.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the scenery is dramatic and picturesque. For example, walking along the old riverfront with century-old buildings and tree-covered rolling hills always makes me feel peaceful and relaxed.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different landscapes around my neighborhood and the interesting things I come across when I'm out and about because photography helps me notice details I would otherwise meet.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different landscapes around my neighborhood and the interesting things I come across when I'm out and about because photography helps me notice details I would otherwise miss.

The verb 'meet' is incorrect here because 'meet' is not used with 'details' in this context. The intended meaning is failing to perceive or notice details, which requires the verb 'miss'. Use 'miss' in present tense to match the rest of the sentence. Suggestion: replace 'meet' with 'miss' to convey 'fail to notice.'

× I refer rural areas because the natural scenery and local wildlife help me more relaxed and appease.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the natural scenery and local wildlife help me feel more relaxed and at ease.

Several errors: 'refer' is the wrong verb; 'prefer' expresses preference. 'Help me more relaxed' is incorrect because 'help' should be followed by a base verb (help me feel) or an object plus adjective using 'feel'. 'Appease' is wrong here; the correct expression is 'at ease' meaning relaxed. Suggestion: use 'prefer', then 'help me feel more relaxed', and 'at ease' instead of 'appease.'

× For example, taking long walks through a quiet views or forest after a busy week in the city is very uh interesting and helps me and wide.

✓ For example, taking long walks through quiet views or a forest after a busy week in the city is very interesting and helps me unwind.

Multiple problems: 'a quiet views' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or change 'views' to 'view' but 'quiet views' works without article. 'or forest' needs an article: 'a forest'. The filler 'uh' should be omitted in written form. 'helps me and wide' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'helps me unwind' meaning relax. Also 'very interesting' is fine. Suggestion: use consistent articles ('a forest') and replace 'helps me and wide' with 'helps me unwind.'

× I prefer the views in my own country because the scenery is dramatic and picturesque.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because the scenery is dramatic and picturesque.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'The views' and 'the scenery' are appropriately used. No changes necessary.

× For example, when I walk along the old riverfront with century old buildings and tree covered rolling hills, I feel peaceful and relaxed by the beauty of the place.

✓ For example, when I walk along the old riverfront with century-old buildings and tree-covered rolling hills, I feel peaceful and relaxed because of the beauty of the place.

Compound adjectives that precede a noun should be hyphenated: 'century-old' and 'tree-covered.' Also 'peaceful and relaxed by the beauty' is awkward; use 'because of the beauty' or 'attracted by the beauty.' Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives and change 'by' to 'because of' for clarity.