Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar and verb forms, and keep answers concise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past/infinitive forms (e.g., 'if I visit' or 'when I visit', 'I can take photographs'). Avoid fillers like 'uh' and redundant phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I visit a hill station I often take photos of mountains, rivers and local wildlife, which helps me remember the trip and learn about new landscapes.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and then one or two clear, specific reasons connected with linking words. Use correct tense and pronouns, and avoid vague phrases like 'everything.' For example, say how rural people shared traditions and foods, and briefly contrast with urban areas.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and the locals are welcoming; for instance, villagers often show me traditional foods and explain local customs. In contrast, urban areas are usually too busy for that kind of personal interaction.

제안: Answer directly and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I prefer visiting other countries'). Give one or two specific reasons and avoid vague or awkward phrases like 'previous life of nations.' Use linking words and concise structure. Replace fillers and improve word choice ('cultures', 'traditions', 'cuisines').

예시: I prefer visiting other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and trying new cuisines, which broaden my understanding of how people live. For example, sampling street food and visiting museums in Japan taught me about its history and everyday life.

× if I visited in a hill station, I can took photograph of a mountain, rivers, lakes and animals.

✓ if I visited a hill station, I could take photographs of mountains, rivers, lakes and animals.

Mixed past and modal forms: 'visited' is past, but 'can took' mixes present modal and past simple incorrectly. Use 'could' as past-tense modal and base verb 'take'. Also remove unnecessary 'in' after 'visited' and pluralize countable nouns appropriately ('photographs', 'mountains'). Suggestion: Use consistent tense and correct modal form: 'if I visited... I could take...'.

× it uh, takes me a chance to get explore new places.

✓ it gives me a chance to explore new places.

Incorrect verb constructions: 'takes me a chance to get explore' is ungrammatical. Use 'gives me a chance to explore' or 'allows me to explore'. 'Explore' should be in base form after 'to'. Suggestion: Use verbs like 'gives' or 'allows' followed by 'to' + base verb.

× I prefer rural areas because their environment is very pleasant and calm and often people are very friendly.

✓ I prefer rural areas because their environments are very pleasant and calm, and people are often very friendly.

Pronoun 'their' can be used but singular 'environment' should be plural 'environments' to match 'rural areas' or rephrase to 'the environment there'. Also adverb placement: 'people are often very friendly' is clearer. Suggestion: Match pronouns and noun number or use 'the environment there'.

× They told me about culture, traditional food, how they survive and everything.

✓ They told me about their culture, traditional food, how they survive and everything else.

Missing possessive pronoun before 'culture' causes ambiguity. 'They told me' is past, and 'how they survive' refers to habitual present; keep 'how they survive' or change to 'how they survived' depending on meaning. Here 'survive' as general habit is acceptable, but add 'their' and 'else' for naturalness. Suggestion: Add 'their' before cultural nouns and adjust tense to intended meaning.

× Yes, I prefer to visit in another country because I have keen interest to explore new culture, tradition and different kinds of cuisines which help me to get knowledge about previous life of uh nations and I can enjoy there a lot.

✓ Yes, I prefer to visit another country because I am keen to explore new cultures, traditions and different kinds of cuisine, which help me learn about the previous lives of other nations and enjoy myself a lot there.

Multiple issues: unnecessary 'to' after 'prefer', incorrect article usage and singular/plural forms: use 'visit another country', 'keen to' or 'have a keen interest in', 'cultures', 'traditions', 'cuisine' (uncountable) and 'learn about' instead of 'get knowledge about'. 'Previous life of nations' is awkward; use 'previous lives of other nations'. Also move 'there' to natural position and use 'enjoy myself'. Suggestion: Simplify and use correct collocations: 'prefer to visit another country', 'keen to explore', 'help me learn', 'enjoy myself there'.