Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and grammar mistakes, make the answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example and one reason. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel to the mountains I often photograph rivers, hills, skies and trees because natural scenery relaxes me and lifts my mood after busy work.

제안: Avoid repetition and hesitations; improve vocabulary and sentence accuracy. Give a clear preference or say it depends then explain with two concise, connected reasons using linking words like however and because. Correct collocations (e.g., "hustle and bustle", "pleasant weather").

예시: It depends on my mood. If I want excitement, I prefer urban views because I enjoy the hustle and bustle and the sight of tall buildings. However, when I need relaxation I choose rural areas because the fresh air and green landscapes are peaceful.

제안: Clarify meaning and fix grammar and word choice. Start with a clear statement (I like both but for different reasons), then give two specific supporting details with linking words (for example, while, however). Avoid unclear phrases like "save you" and use accurate nouns (e.g., "historic buildings").

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad for different reasons. At home I appreciate historic buildings, temples and parks because they reflect my culture and are familiar. However, when I travel overseas I enjoy seeing different cultures and meeting new people, which broadens my perspective.

× I am fond of taking pictures uh for different views such as uh when I went to travelling in mountain area, then definitely I would like to taking pictures of a river, hill, skies and trees because it makes me energetic and makes me mood lighter from a hectic work.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of different views. For example, when I went travelling in the mountains, I definitely like taking pictures of a river, hills, the sky and trees because it makes me feel energetic and lifts my mood after hectic work.

Errors: incorrect use of 'to travelling' and 'would like to taking' involve verb + -ing form rules. After 'went' use the base or gerund 'travelling' without 'to'. After 'would like to' use the base verb 'take', or use the gerund with 'like' (like taking). Also plural and article issues fixed (mountains, hills, the sky) and 'makes me mood lighter' corrected to 'lifts my mood' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use gerund alone after 'went' (went travelling) and use 'would like to' + base verb or 'like' + gerund.

× I am fond of taking pictures uh for different views such as uh when I went to travelling in mountain area, then definitely I would like to taking pictures of a river, hill, skies and trees because it makes me energetic and makes me mood lighter from a hectic work.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of different views. For example, when I went travelling in the mountains, I definitely like taking pictures of a river, hills, the sky and trees because it makes me feel energetic and lifts my mood after hectic work.

Errors: singular/plural mismatches 'hill' vs 'hills', 'skies' used where 'the sky' is more natural, and 'a hectic work' should be 'hectic work' or 'a hectic job'. Suggestion: Ensure nouns agree in number and use uncountable or definite forms appropriately (the sky; hectic work).

× To be honest, it depends on my mood. Sometimes I want to view in urban areas because there are are hustle and versatile and tall buildings.

✓ To be honest, it depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer urban areas because there is hustle and bustle, variety and tall buildings.

Errors: 'want to view in' is unnatural; use 'prefer' or 'visit'. 'There are are hustle and versatile' contains tense/word choice issues and repetition. 'Hustle and bustle' is the correct phrase and 'versatile' is wrong for 'variety'. Suggestion: Use simple present 'prefer' for habitual statements and correct collocations like 'hustle and bustle' and 'variety'.

× Uh, after that, uh, on the other side, I visit to rural area to feel fresh air and feel greenery because, uh, there are pleasant weather.

✓ On the other hand, I visit rural areas to enjoy fresh air and greenery because the weather is pleasant.

Errors: 'visit to rural area' uses wrong preposition — 'visit' is followed directly by the place (visit rural areas). 'Feel fresh air and feel greenery' is awkward; use 'enjoy fresh air and greenery'. 'There are pleasant weather' is incorrect subject-verb and article usage; correct is 'the weather is pleasant.' Suggestion: Remove unnecessary prepositions after 'visit', use appropriate verbs for experiences (enjoy), and match subject and verb for weather ('weather is').

× Well, it depends on the situation. On the one hand, I lived in my own country this time, so I prefer to save you in my own country.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation. On the one hand, I live in my own country now, so I prefer to stay in my own country.

Errors: 'lived' is past tense but context requires present 'live'. 'Prefer to save you in my own country' is incorrect word choice and pronoun; likely meant 'prefer to stay in my own country.' Suggestion: Use present tense for current situations and choose correct verbs ('stay') and avoid pronoun errors.

× Such a very storied buildings, temples, parks and so on.

✓ There are many historic buildings, temples, parks and so on.

Errors: 'Such a very storied buildings' mixes determiners and adjective forms incorrectly. 'Storied' is uncommon; 'historic' or 'many-story' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use correct determiner and adjective order: 'many historic buildings' or 'very tall, multi-storey buildings' if referring to tall buildings.

× On the other hand, if I get a chance to go abroad, then I definitely would like to see new people culturally.

✓ On the other hand, if I get a chance to go abroad, I would definitely like to experience new cultures and meet different people.

Errors: 'would definitely like' is acceptable but 'see new people culturally' is awkward. Use modal 'would like' with clearer object: 'experience new cultures' or 'meet different people'. Suggestion: Pair modal 'would like' with an infinitive and use natural collocations like 'experience new cultures'.