Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise by correcting grammar and removing redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a short example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

예시: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views because I love nature. For example, I often take photos of forests and rivers to capture their colors and textures.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve vocabulary and sentence structure. Give one clear preference sentence, a reason with a specific detail, and a brief comparison using a linking word like 'whereas' or 'while.'

예시: I prefer rural areas because the scenery is more natural and authentic. For example, I like photographing fields and forests, whereas urban views often have more man-made structures and less greenery.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your preference clearly, give a specific reason or feature you admire, and provide one brief example. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast.

예시: My country is beautiful, but I prefer views in Switzerland because of its dramatic mountains and clear lakes. For instance, the Swiss Alps offer stunning panoramic scenes that I find inspiring to photograph.

× So I would love to take pictures on of a different scenarios, different scenes because I love everything from nature, Mother Nature.

✓ So I would love to take pictures of different scenes because I love everything about nature, Mother Nature.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'on of' and plural mismatch 'a different scenarios'. Fixes: use 'of' after 'take pictures' and match article with plural by removing 'a' and using 'different scenes'. Also 'everything from nature' is unnatural; use 'about nature'. Suggestion: say 'take pictures of different scenes' and 'everything about nature'.

× I would love to choose, I would love to prefer rural area because right there everything is organic.

✓ I would choose rural areas because everything there is organic.

Errors: unnecessary repetitions 'I would love to choose, I would love to prefer'; incorrect use of singular 'rural area' when speaking generally; awkward word order 'right there'. Fixes: use simple present preference 'I would choose' or 'I would prefer', use plural 'rural areas' to express a general preference, and place 'there' after 'everything'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'I would choose rural areas because everything there is organic.'

× Nothing is artificial.

✓ Nothing is artificial.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. It uses singular 'nothing' appropriately with 'is'.

× The jungle, the views, everything overall, everything is so dashing right there and everything.

✓ The jungle and the views are all so impressive there.

Errors: wordiness and repetition 'everything overall, everything' and incorrect adjective 'dashing' for scenery. Also subject listing with singular verb 'is' is inconsistent. Fixes: combine subjects with plural verb 'are' and choose a suitable adjective like 'impressive'. Suggestion: streamline: 'The jungle and the views are all so impressive there.'

× I'm talking about that. My country too is so much beautiful.

✓ I mean my country is also very beautiful.

Errors: 'I'm talking about that' is unnatural for this context; 'too' placement awkward; 'so much beautiful' is incorrect collocation. Fixes: use 'I mean' for clarification, place 'also' after subject, and use 'very beautiful' instead of 'so much beautiful'. Suggestion: 'I mean my country is also very beautiful.'

× But I prefer Switzerland because it's it's very beautiful.

✓ But I prefer Switzerland because it is very beautiful.

Errors: repeated 'it's it's' and colloquial contraction repeated. Fixes: remove duplicate and use 'it is' or 'it's'. Suggestion: 'But I prefer Switzerland because it is very beautiful.'

× It's very beautiful.

✓ It is very beautiful.

Grammatically both 'it's' and 'it is' are correct; expanded form preferred in formal speech. No verb agreement error. Using full form improves clarity in speaking tests.