Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct small grammar issues (e.g., use plural/singular consistently and avoid repeating 'especially').

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I particularly like mountain landscapes in winter because the snowy peaks contrast strongly with the darker rocky bases, creating striking compositions that highlight texture and color.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then support it with distinct, specific examples. Use linking words (for example, whereas, also) and avoid trailing off. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different moods. For example, rural sunsets and sunrises over open fields feel peaceful and colorful, whereas the downtown skyline at night is vibrant and full of lights, which creates a very different atmosphere.

제안: Answer directly with a clear stance and give concise, specific reasons. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetitions. Use linking words (for instance, however, also) to contrast views from different countries and mention one concrete example of a place or scene.

예시: I enjoy views both at home and abroad, for different reasons. For instance, in my country I love the dramatic mountain scenery, while living in Canada I appreciated the clean, orderly urban parks and cityscapes, which offered a pleasant contrast to rural mountain views.

× I especially like taking pictures of mountains and that too especially in winters because in winters the peak of the mountains are white and the bottom part if the mountain is rocky, is black and if it is green, uh, if it is uh, uh, soil.

✓ I especially like taking pictures of mountains, and that too especially in winter because in winter the peak of the mountains is white and the bottom part of the mountain is rocky and black, or green if it is covered in soil.

The error concerns subject-verb agreement with third person singular subjects (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 27). 'Peak' is singular and requires the singular verb 'is' rather than 'are'. Also several other grammatical problems appear (article use and awkward phrasing) but per instructions we correct only issues listed. Improvements: match singular subjects with singular verbs, simplify repetitive words (remove extra 'uh' and duplicate 'in winters'), and reorder phrases for clarity. Use 'winter' (uncountable) instead of plural 'winters' for general statements and 'bottom part of the mountain' for correct prepositional structure.

× And if I talk about the urban areas, I like the view which we get in the downtown in in my city where I live, the downtown has.

✓ And if I talk about urban areas, I like the view we get in the downtown of the city where I live.

The main issue is incorrect and redundant pronoun and noun usage (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). The original repeats 'in' and uses an incomplete clause 'the downtown has' without an object. Corrections remove redundancy and clarify the referent: 'the downtown of the city where I live.' Also simplifies 'which we get' to 'we get' for natural speech.

× I prefer views in my country and in other countries also. So in my country I prefer the views which I have seen in the mountainous areas and if I talk about other countries, I have lived in Canada also. So I prefer the views which I get in the urban areas of the.

✓ I prefer views in my country and in other countries as well. In my country I prefer the views I have seen in mountainous areas, and regarding other countries, I have lived in Canada, so I like the views I see in urban areas there.

This contains sentence structure and incomplete sentence problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 23). The final sentence ends abruptly 'in the.' and clauses are repetitive. Corrections complete the sentence, remove redundancy ('also' moved to 'as well'), and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb. Suggestions: avoid sentence fragments, connect related ideas with conjunctions, and finish clauses with the necessary objects.