Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with simple linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb tense and word choice (e.g. 'feel' not 'felt', 'remind me of' not 'remind').

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they make me feel happy and relaxed. For example, when I look at pictures of a beach or a mountain, they remind me of the place and the atmosphere, which lifts my mood.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a specific reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'prefer' and 'countryside') and grammar (subject-verb agreement and past/present tense). Avoid unclear words like 'bulls' and 'Wales' unless you mean them. Use a linking word to connect reason.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the city and rarely see the countryside. For instance, I enjoy landscapes with fields and trees since they feel peaceful compared with busy streets.

제안: Begin with a direct statement, then give a clear, specific reason. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'I prefer views in other countries' and 'I haven't seen them before') and natural phrasing ('broaden my horizons' instead of 'brought my eyesight in my brain'). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they are new to me and can broaden my horizons. For example, seeing architecture or landscapes I haven't experienced before gives me fresh perspectives and inspiration.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I saw these pictures I will felt more happy and joyful.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I see these pictures I feel happier and more joyful.

The student mixed past and future forms incorrectly. 'Saw' is past; 'will felt' combines future auxiliary with past participle, which is wrong. The intended meaning is a habitual or general reaction, so present simple should be used: 'when I see' and 'I feel'. Also use comparative 'happier' and the adverb 'more' with 'joyful' is redundant; 'more joyful' is acceptable but here 'happier and more joyful' is clearer.

× When I saw these pictures I can remind the scenes and the landscape.

✓ When I see these pictures I can remember the scenes and the landscape.

The sentence mixes past 'saw' with modal 'can' which indicates ability in the present. Use present simple 'see' for habitual action. Also 'remind' is transitive and means 'cause someone to remember'; the student needs 'remember' to express that they recall the scenes. 'Landscape' can be left singular or plural depending on meaning; 'the scenes and the landscapes' is also possible.

× I more prefer bulls in rural areas because I live in the city and I have didn't say the countryside Wales in the daily.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas more because I live in the city and I don't visit the countryside in daily life.

Original has several issues: 'more prefer' is incorrect — 'prefer' already expresses comparison; use 'prefer ... more' or just 'prefer'. 'Bulls' is a wrong word for 'views'. 'I have didn't say the countryside Wales in the daily' is ungrammatical: 'have didn't' is wrong auxiliary usage and word order is incorrect. To express habitual absence, use simple present negative 'I don't visit the countryside in daily life.' This corrects quantifier/degree and auxiliary errors and clarifies meaning.

× And more prefer views in other countries because the views in other countries is I did not see it before and it can brought my eyesight in my brain.

✓ I also prefer views in other countries because those views are ones I have not seen before and they broaden my horizons.

Several tense and agreement errors: 'And more prefer' should be 'I also prefer' or 'I prefer ... more'. 'The views in other countries is' has subject-verb agreement error: use 'are'. 'I did not see it before' mixes past simple with intended present perfect for experience — use 'I have not seen before'. 'It can brought' mixes modal with past participle; correct meaning is 'they broaden my horizons' or 'they expand my view'. Using 'broaden my horizons' is idiomatic and uses correct tense and agreement.