Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrase like "save as a memory" — use "to remember the place" or "to capture memories." Keep it to 1–2 sentences and use a linking word if you add detail.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes so I can look back on those moments later.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a direct topic sentence ("I prefer urban views"). Use correct phrases ("I usually live in a rural area"). Give one specific reason and a linking word like "because" or "so". Keep it within 1–2 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I usually live in a rural area and enjoy discovering new places. For example, I like photographing interesting architecture and busy streets to learn more about the city.

제안: Work on fluency and vocabulary. Start with a clear statement ("I prefer views from other countries"). Remove filler words ("uh," "let me think") and use correct forms ("prefer" not "preferly"). Provide a concise, specific reason and an example, using a linking word such as "because" or "for example."

예시: I prefer views from other countries because they often feel more exotic and different from what I see at home. For example, I enjoy photos of European old towns and Asian temples because their architecture and colours are unique compared with my country.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views to save as a memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views to keep as memories.

Using 'like to take' is acceptable but 'like taking' is more natural when describing a hobby; 'save as a memory' is awkward — use 'keep as memories' or 'save as a memory' singular doesn't match 'pictures' so use plural 'memories'. Suggestion: use 'like taking' + 'keep as memories' for natural phrasing and noun number agreement.

× As usually I live in rural areas so I prefer to take pictures of views in urban areas because I want to locate some new places.

✓ As I usually live in a rural area, I prefer to take pictures of views in urban areas because I want to find new places.

Problems: word order and article use. 'As usually I live' is incorrect; use 'As I usually live' or 'Usually, I live' and 'rural areas' should be 'a rural area' if speaking of where you live in general. 'Locate some new places' is awkward in this context; 'find new places' is more natural. Also the sentence had redundancy with 'so'; use a single connector. Suggestion: start with 'As I usually live in a rural area' or simply 'Because I usually live in a rural area'. Ensure article usage and natural verb choice.

× Usually let me thinking uh, I preferly views of other countries as they look more beautiful from my country as uh.

✓ Let me think. Usually, I prefer views from other countries because they look more beautiful than those in my country.

Multiple issues: 'Usually let me thinking' is ungrammatical — use 'Let me think' for a pause. 'I preferly views' is incorrect; 'prefer' is a verb that needs an object: 'I prefer views' and 'preferly' is not a word. Preposition use: 'views of other countries' should be 'views from other countries'. Comparison: 'as they look more beautiful from my country' is incorrect; you must compare to 'those in my country' and use 'more beautiful than'. Suggestion: separate the hesitation ('Let me think') from the answer, use 'prefer views from other countries' and 'more beautiful than those in my country' for a clear comparative structure.