Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammatical errors, avoid redundancy, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "for example"). Also correct number/phrase mistakes (e.g., "three for trips" is unclear) and name places correctly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing historical sites because they often have interesting architecture and stories behind them. For example, when I visited Hungary last year I took many photos of old churches and city squares to remember the trip.

제안: Be direct and grammatical: give a clear preference in the first sentence, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., "classes of historical elements"). Use precise vocabulary like "urban areas have historical buildings and museums".

예시: I prefer urban views because cities often contain historical buildings and museums that I find fascinating. For instance, I enjoy walking through old town centers where I can photograph monuments and learn about local history.

제안: Structure your answer: state your preference first, then explain with specific reasons and give a short contrast using linking phrases like "however" or "on the other hand". Use correct tense and smoother phrasing (e.g., "I prefer views in my country because they teach me about our history; however, I also enjoy photos from other countries to learn about different cultures").

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they help me understand and remember our history. However, I also like photographing scenes in other countries since they teach me about different cultures and ways of life.

× 'I love capturing beautiful pictures when I travel and taking photos help me remember special moments.'

✓ 'I love capturing beautiful pictures when I travel, and taking photos helps me remember special moments.'

'taking photos' is the subject of the second clause and is singular in sense, so the verb must be 'helps' to agree with the subject (subject-verb agreement). Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: Identify the true subject of each clause and ensure the verb agrees (singular subjects take singular verbs like helps).

× 'And usually I go on three for trips.'

✓ 'And usually I go on three trips.'

'three' already quantifies 'trips', so the extra word 'for' is incorrect. This is an incorrect use of a word affecting quantification. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary words when using numerals or quantifiers: say 'three trips'.'

× 'Historical places like summer camps or Hungary because I like historical places.'

✓ 'I visit historical places, such as summer camps or cities like Budapest in Hungary, because I like history.'

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear (sentence structure errors). It mixes noun phrases without a main verb and repeats ideas. Suggestion: Provide a clear subject and verb ('I visit') and make the object clear ('historical places, such as...') and avoid repetition by using 'history' instead of repeating 'historical places'. Note: I inferred a clearer meaning; adjust specific place names as needed.

× 'OK, I like both of you, but are urban urban areas I like more because urban areas is classes of historical elements, historical places.'

✓ 'OK, I like both urban and rural areas, but I prefer urban areas because they contain many historical elements and places.'

Multiple pronoun and referent issues and unclear phrasing (incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure). 'Both of you' incorrectly addresses the listener; student meant 'both' types. 'Are urban urban areas I like more' lacks subject-verb structure. 'Urban areas is' is wrong number and pronoun agreement. Suggestion: Replace 'both of you' with 'both urban and rural areas', use 'prefer' for preference, and make subject-verb agreement ('urban areas' with 'they contain').

× 'And I want and I love learn historical place because we learn our history.'

✓ 'And I want to and I love learning about historical places because we learn our history.'

Verb form errors and tense/aspect issues: 'want and I love learn' requires infinitive or gerund forms. Use 'want to' + base verb or 'love' + gerund. 'Historical place' should be plural 'places' to match context. Suggestion: Use 'want to learn' or 'love learning' consistently; here 'love learning about historical places' is natural. Also 'we learn our history' is acceptable but fits better as 'we learn about our history' for clarity.

× 'Especially I like views in my own country because we will learn our history.'

✓ 'I especially like views in my own country because we can learn about our history.'

Tense and modality: 'we will learn our history' implies future certainty, but the student likely means a general ability or opportunity, so 'can learn' is more appropriate. Word order: 'Especially' should follow subject or be placed as 'I especially like'. Also add 'about' after 'learn' for correct collocation: 'learn about our history'. Suggestion: Use 'especially' after subject and choose 'can learn' for general statements.

× 'What another hand we must learn other countries because from this we can take many information about their culture.'

✓ 'On the other hand, we must learn about other countries because from them we can get a lot of information about their cultures.'

Multiple sentence structure errors and incorrect connector: 'What another hand' should be 'On the other hand'. 'Learn other countries' needs the preposition 'about'. 'From this' is vague; use 'from them' (referring to countries). 'Take many information' is ungrammatical; use 'get a lot of information' and 'their culture' -> 'their cultures' or 'their culture' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use standard discourse markers ('On the other hand'), correct prepositions ('learn about'), and collocations ('get information', 'a lot of').