Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer, more coherent and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeated or incorrect words (e.g. 'pothos', 'potholes', 'bottle'), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep responses under five sentences and use accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'memories', 'photos', 'moments').

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories of places I’ve visited. For example, when I look at pictures of a sunset at the beach, I can immediately remember the colours, the sound of the waves and who I was with. This always makes me feel grateful and happy.

제안: Improve grammar (verb tense and countable nouns), reduce hesitations, and structure answer: topic sentence plus specific supporting details with linking words. Mention concrete examples and a brief reason why rural views appeal to you (e.g. peace, fresh air).

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful natural scenery like blue lakes, mountains and wide fields. For instance, hiking in a mountain valley lets me enjoy fresh air and quiet surroundings, and photos I take there help me remember the calm feeling and the exact location.

제안: Clarify meaning and avoid incorrect words ('beers' likely meant 'views' or 'places'). Give a direct answer (own country or others), then support with one or two clear reasons using linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition. Provide a short contrast if you like both.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad lets me experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, visiting Japan taught me about unique architecture and local customs, whereas staying in my home country is comfortable but more familiar.

× Absolutely yes, I really love to take pictures of different scenery.

✓ Absolutely, yes. I really love taking pictures of different scenery.

Use of 'take pictures' is not incorrect but 'love taking' (gerund) sounds more natural after 'love'. Also add a comma after 'Absolutely' and a period to separate short responses. No change in meaning; improves fluency.

× different scenery

✓ different sceneries or different scenes

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun when referring to landscape in general. If the speaker means multiple distinct scenes, use 'different scenes' or 'different sceneries' (less common). Choose 'different scenes' for clarity.

× It is because I could reminisce those pothos and be just whenever I want to remind myself that I already went to that place.

✓ It is because I can reminisce about those photos whenever I want to remind myself that I have been to that place.

Multiple issues: wrong word choices ('pothos' should be 'photos'), incorrect verb/modal ('could' -> 'can' for present ability), missing preposition ('reminisce about'), incorrect tense ('already went' -> present perfect 'have been'). Correcting improves grammar and clarity.

× And also it gives me a delighted feeling whenever I see my potholes and be just from the past.

✓ Also, it gives me a delighted feeling whenever I see my photos from the past.

Wrong words: 'potholes' should be 'photos'; 'be just' is ungrammatical and unnecessary. Remove filler words and fix word choice to convey the intended meaning.

× It keeps me reminded that I'm blessed and I should be.

✓ It keeps reminding me that I'm blessed and I should be.

Use 'keeps reminding me' rather than 'keeps me reminded'. 'Keeps me reminded' is nonstandard. Also meaning unclear: 'and I should be' is vague but kept; consider 'and I should be grateful' for clarity.

× Food for all those experiences and also it is a great thing to save that bottle because, uh, it will, it maybe will never happen again.

✓ Those photos are like food for my memories, and it is great to save them because the moment may never happen again.

Many wrong or confused words: 'Food for all those experiences' needs a clearer metaphor; 'save that bottle' is incorrect—should be 'save them' (photos). 'It will, it maybe will never happen again' is redundant; correct to 'may never happen again'. This fixes word choice and sentence flow.

× I personally preferred taking a pictures, uh, in rural areas because they have a lot of, uh, magnificent scenery, the beautiful blue lakes.

✓ I personally prefer taking pictures in rural areas because they have a lot of magnificent scenery, like beautiful blue lakes.

Tense: 'preferred' (past) is inconsistent with general preference; use present 'prefer'. Also 'a pictures' is plural mismatch; remove 'a'. 'Like' connects examples. Fixed subject-verb and number agreement.

× taking a pictures

✓ taking pictures

'Pictures' is plural so 'a' should not be used. Use 'taking pictures' or 'taking a picture'.

× They also have valleys and mountains and lots of trees and grasses that I could, uh, enjoy.

✓ They also have valleys and mountains and lots of trees and grasses that I can enjoy.

Use present ability 'can' rather than modal 'could' when stating a general fact about what one can enjoy now. 'Grasses' is unusual—'grass' or 'fields of grass' may be better, but 'grasses' is acceptable for different types.

× And when I'm taking a pictures and saved it on my phone, it definitely gives. Be a self fulfillment whenever I reflect and browse those pictures and it reminds me that I've been there and it also.

✓ When I take pictures and save them on my phone, it definitely gives me a sense of self-fulfillment whenever I reflect and browse those pictures; it reminds me that I've been there.

Multiple issues: 'taking a pictures' (number error), inconsistent tenses ('I'm taking' and 'saved' should be 'take' and 'save'), fragmented sentence ('gives. Be a self fulfillment'), wrong phrase 'self fulfillment' -> 'a sense of self-fulfillment', and trailing 'and it also' is incomplete. Rewriting yields a grammatical, complete sentence.

× I believe I, I really like, uh, beers from other countries.

✓ I believe I really like beers from other countries.

Remove repeated fillers and commas. The sentence is grammatical after removing disfluencies. Context: speaker probably meant 'views' or 'places' rather than 'beers'—if 'beers' is intended, it's fine.

× It is because I could learn their, uh, culture, traditions and it is a great experience to explore other, uh, land.

✓ It is because I can learn about their culture and traditions, and it is a great experience to explore other countries.

Use 'can' for present ability, add 'about' after 'learn', pluralize 'countries' or use 'lands' as appropriate; 'other land' is awkward—'other countries' fits context. Also connect clauses with comma and 'and'.

× Our, our uh, world is big. There's a lot to be explored. You have to travel and see the. For places around the globe, although I really like to travel in my own home country, but I already know a lot of it so I want to travel uh.

✓ Our world is big; there is a lot to explore. You have to travel and see places around the globe. Although I like to travel in my own country, I already know a lot of it, so I want to travel to other places.

Remove repetitions and fillers, fix 'There's a lot to be explored' to 'there is a lot to explore', complete the fragment 'see the.' to 'see places', remove double conjunction 'although... but' (choose one), and add 'to other places' for clarity.