Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep answers natural and within 3–5 sentences. For example, state directly that you enjoy photography, then give a specific instance and why it matters.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visited Kyoto last year I used my smartphone to capture temples and autumn leaves because I wanted to remember the colors and the atmosphere. I find photography a relaxing way to record travel memories.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give two clear, specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid minor grammar errors and repetition.

예시: I prefer rural views. Because I grew up in the countryside, I value the clean air and wide open spaces, and there are no tall buildings blocking the scenery, so I can enjoy long, uninterrupted views of the landscape.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first (e.g., 'I don't have a strong preference') and then support it with specific comparisons and reasons using linking words. Reduce fillers and correct small word choices (e.g., 'view' not 'video').

예시: I don't have a strong preference between views in my country and abroad. China has many dramatic landscapes, while European cities offer historic architecture; therefore, I enjoy scenic countryside and interesting urban skylines equally, as long as the scene is beautiful.

× I like to take out my smartphone to take pictures for every point, every beautiful sight and every beautiful views.

✓ I like to take out my smartphone to take pictures of every point, every beautiful sight and every beautiful view.

The preposition should be 'of' rather than 'for' when taking pictures 'of' something. Also 'views' is plural while the phrase uses 'every', which requires a singular noun; change 'views' to 'view' or remove 'every'. Use consistent singular form after 'every'. Suggested improvement: say 'take pictures of every beautiful view' or 'take pictures of beautiful views'.

× I like to take out my smartphone to take pictures for every point, every beautiful sight and every beautiful views.

✓ I like to take out my smartphone to take pictures of every point, every beautiful sight and every beautiful view.

The word 'every' requires singular nouns ('every view' not 'every views'). Change 'views' to 'view' to match singular usage. Also replace 'for' with 'of' for correct collocation. Suggested improvement: use 'every' with singular nouns or remove 'every' and use plural nouns consistently.

× Uh, that was, uh, very, that was, uh, that was a very, uh, interesting, uh, activity.

✓ That was a very interesting activity.

The original contains redundant filler words and repeated phrases which disrupt sentence structure. Remove fillers and repetitions to form a concise sentence. Practice pausing briefly instead of repeating words to improve fluency.

× Actually I prefer rural areas because I grew up in countryside and the the air is very good.

✓ Actually I prefer rural areas because I grew up in the countryside and the air is very good.

When referring to 'countryside' in a general sense with 'grew up in', use the definite article 'the countryside'. Also remove the duplicated 'the the'. Suggested improvement: remember fixed expressions like 'in the countryside' require 'the'.

× There is no much air pollution and there are no high buildings there.

✓ There is not much air pollution and there are no tall buildings there.

Use 'not much' rather than 'no much' for uncountable nouns like 'air pollution'. For buildings, 'tall' is a more natural adjective than 'high'. Suggested improvement: use 'not much' with uncountable nouns and choose appropriate adjectives.

× So you can see very far and that was very great.

✓ So you can see very far and that was great.

'Very great' is unnatural in English; 'great' alone suffices. Also tense consistency: if describing a past visit, 'that was great' is fine; if general truth, 'that is great' might be better. Suggested improvement: avoid combining 'very' with adjectives that don't naturally take it; choose stronger adjectives if needed.

× While it's difficult to judge because China has its own beautiful sites and the other countries, especially some European countries, have their own, umm, beautiful views.

✓ It's difficult to judge because China has its own beautiful sites and other countries, especially some in Europe, have their own beautiful views.

The conjunction 'while' is unnecessary here and causes a clumsy sentence start; removing it clarifies meaning. Also 'the other countries' should be 'other countries' and 'some European countries' can be tightened to 'some in Europe'. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggested improvement: avoid unnecessary conjunctions at the start and remove filler words to make answers clearer.

× So uh, I don't have a fixed answer. Uh, as long as the video is beautiful, I love it.

✓ So I don't have a fixed answer. As long as the view is beautiful, I love it.

The speaker said 'video' but the context asks about views; 'view' is the correct noun. Remove filler words 'uh' and 'so uh' for clarity. Pronoun/noun choice must match context. Suggested improvement: choose nouns that match the question topic and avoid fillers.