Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, you know), and use correct verb forms and articles. Add one specific example to make your answer more vivid. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views; it’s one of my hobbies. I always carry a compact camera and try to photograph landscapes such as mountain ranges or lakes. For example, last summer I photographed a lake at sunrise and captured the reflection of the mountains, which was very memorable.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles). Explain one reason with a linking word (because, so) and provide a concrete example instead of vague phrases like “St. Lights.” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the countryside and want new experiences. For example, I enjoy photographing city scenes like illuminated streets and modern architecture at night because they look very different from rural landscapes.

제안: Answer directly and avoid contradictory statements. If you prefer foreign views, explain why with clear grammar and one concrete example. Remove fillers and unclear phrases. Keep to 2–3 sentences and mention a specific place abroad you want to photograph or a clear reason.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad allows me to experience different cultures and architecture. For instance, I would love to photograph the historic streets of Rome to capture its ancient buildings and vibrant street life.

× You know, I think, uh, record the views I see is a very impressive thing, like the mountains, lakes and different views.

✓ You know, I think, uh, recording the views I see is a very impressive thing, like the mountains, lakes and different scenes.

The verb 'record' after 'think' functions as a noun (gerund) when referring to the action itself, so it needs the -ing form 'recording'. Also 'views' is repeated; 'different scenes' is clearer. Suggestion: use gerund after 'think' when naming an activity and avoid repeating the same noun.

× I have a camera so I can take it with me everywhere.

✓ I have a camera so I can take it with me everywhere I go.

The original sentence is understandable but sounds incomplete; add 'I go' to clarify movement and correct natural collocation 'take it with me everywhere I go'. Suggestion: include a clause after 'everywhere' when indicating movement.

× I prefer views in city life, you know, 'cause I was born in the countryside, so the real life is familiar to me.

✓ I prefer views of city life, you know, because I was born in the countryside, so rural life is familiar to me.

Use 'views of' rather than 'views in' to describe perspectives about city life. Also 'real life' is vague; 'rural life' fits contrasted with city life. Replace informal ' 'cause 'with 'because' in formal corrections. Suggestion: choose the correct preposition 'of' with 'views' and use consistent vocabulary when contrasting places.

× I want to experience a different views, so the urban life is the perfect.

✓ I want to experience different views, so urban life is perfect for me.

'Different views' should not have the article 'a' because 'views' is plural. 'The urban life' is unnatural here; use 'urban life' and add 'for me' to complete the idea. Suggestion: match articles to singular/plural nouns and prefer natural noun phrases.

× It's a priority such as St. Lights.

✓ It's a priority, such as the street lights.

The phrase 'St. Lights' is unclear and nonstandard. Likely intended 'street lights'; add 'the' and correct phrase to form a clear example after 'such as'. Suggestion: use full forms and include articles when referring to specific examples.

× Definitely in other countries, you know, for me, uh, not, uh, truly means experiencing the different culture.

✓ Definitely in other countries, you know; for me, traveling truly means experiencing different cultures.

The original sentence has misplaced words and pronoun/reference issues. 'Not, uh, truly' is confusing. Clarify subject 'traveling' and use plural 'cultures' when speaking generally. Suggestion: state the activity (traveling) explicitly and match singular/plural for 'culture' when generalizing.

× Uh, so for me, I was born the thousand of China, so I want to, uh, travel to the northern of China, such as Beijing.

✓ I was born in the south of China, so I want to travel to the north of China, for example to Beijing.

'Born the thousand of China' is ungrammatical and probably a mistaken phrase; corrected to 'born in the south of China'. Use preposition 'in' with regions and 'to the north' for destination. 'Such as Beijing' becomes 'for example to Beijing' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct regional prepositions ('in the south', 'to the north') and give clear examples.

× Umm, you know, the view is that.

✓ Umm, you know, that's the kind of view I mean.

Original sentence is vague and not a complete clear expression. Rewriting to 'that's the kind of view I mean' makes it a natural, complete response. Suggestion: use complete clauses to clarify meaning rather than short, unclear fragments.