Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition, correct grammatical errors, and make the answer more concise and varied. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement (e.g., “I love photography”), avoid repeating phrases like “new, new,” and use natural collocations (e.g., “take photos” or “capture views”).

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because I’m passionate about photography. For example, I often stroll through parks and by rivers to capture sunsets and interesting textures. Additionally, taking pictures helps me relax and remember places I’ve visited.

제안: Be more concise and use more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide one concrete example and explain why you prefer rural scenes using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “moreover”). Fix grammar (e.g., “different types of landscapes,” “green areas that attract me”). Avoid fillers like “uh” and informal phrases like “so yeah.”

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy the countryside’s varied landscapes. For example, in my village there are mountains and wide green fields that create peaceful compositions. Moreover, natural light and quiet surroundings make it easier for me to take meaningful photographs.

제안: Clarify and simplify your explanation, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words such as “because,” “therefore,” or “for instance.” Correct mistakes like “in my country I’ve lived since childhood” and replace repetitive phrases with varied vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “landscapes,” “new places”).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I have seen the same scenery in my country for most of my life. For instance, I enjoy traveling to coastal towns or foreign cities to discover different architecture and natural landscapes, which feels more exciting and refreshing.

× I definitely like taking pictures of different views because I'm a person who love photography and I'm fond of photography.

✓ I definitely like taking pictures of different views because I'm a person who loves photography and I'm fond of photography.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'who' refers to 'a person' (singular), so the verb must be 'loves' not 'love'. Suggestion: use 'who loves' to match singular subject.

× So I always try to capture new, new views so that I can enjoy my free time.

✓ So I always try to capture new views so that I can enjoy my free time.

Repetition and unnecessary comma: 'new, new views' is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove the repetition and comma. Suggestion: say 'new views' or 'different views'.

× And I also enjoy the beauty of the nature.

✓ And I also enjoy the beauty of nature.

Incorrect use of the definite article: when speaking about nature in general, no article is needed. Use 'nature' not 'the nature'. Suggestion: 'the nature' is used when referring to a specific aspect or type of nature.

× So I click pictures everywhere, wherever I go.

✓ So I take pictures everywhere I go.

Incorrect collocation: native speakers usually 'take pictures' rather than 'click pictures'. Also 'everywhere, wherever I go' is redundant; 'everywhere I go' is concise. Suggestion: use 'take pictures'.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because I love the countryside and different type of landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love the countryside and different types of landscapes.

Quantifier/plural error: 'different type of landscapes' should be plural 'different types of landscapes' or 'different types of landscape'. Match plural noun form. Suggestion: use 'different types of landscapes'.

× For example, uh, in my village, I always try to capture the different moments.

✓ For example, in my village I always try to capture different moments.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'different moments' is awkward here. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: 'capture different moments' is natural.

× Like there are a lot of mountains and the greenery areas which attracts me.

✓ There are a lot of mountains and green areas which attract me.

Subject-verb agreement and adjective use: 'areas' plural requires 'attract' not 'attracts'. 'Greenery areas' is not natural; use 'green areas' or 'greenery' (uncountable). Suggestion: 'green areas' or 'the greenery' depending on meaning.

× And I love to enjoy the beauty of nature.

✓ And I enjoy the beauty of nature.

Unnecessary infinitive 'to enjoy' after 'I love' is acceptable but awkward here; 'I enjoy' is simpler and more natural. Suggestion: use 'I enjoy the beauty of nature'.

× I prefer views in other countries because in my countries I'm living since my childhood and I am watching continuously same the area, same landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because in my country I've been living since my childhood and I have been seeing the same areas and landscapes continuously.

Multiple errors: 'my countries' should be singular 'my country' if speaker means their own country. Tense: 'since my childhood' requires present perfect (have been living). Word order and article: 'continuously same the area' is ungrammatical; use 'the same areas and landscapes' or 'the same areas and landscapes continuously'. Suggestion: 'I've been living in my country since childhood and have seen the same areas and landscapes'.

× So I prefer different views so that I can enjoy and I want to explore the different views in other countries.

✓ So I prefer different views because I want to enjoy and explore the scenery in other countries.

Repetition and structure: 'prefer different views so that I can enjoy and I want to explore the different views' is redundant. Use a single clear reason: 'because I want to enjoy and explore the scenery'. Suggestion: combine phrases and avoid repeating 'different views'.

× So yeah, I mostly prefer views in other countries.

✓ So yes, I mostly prefer views in other countries.

Style issue: 'So yeah' is conversational; 'So yes' is slightly more formal. No major grammatical error, but replace 'yeah' if aiming for more formal speech. Suggestion: use 'yes' or keep 'yeah' depending on formality.