Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/for instance). Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and incorrect word choices (temperatures, scenario).

예시: Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because each scene evokes different emotions. For example, when I photograph a green forest I feel peaceful, and when I capture a busy city street I feel excited.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain with two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Use correct phrases (I am close to nature / I love nature) and avoid vague words like 'upper areas'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because I love being close to nature and find green landscapes relaxing. For example, clear skies and forests make me feel at home, so I usually choose countryside locations over cities.

제안: Answer directly and correct word usage (terraced fields, feel more peaceful). Provide concise reasons and a brief example or personal memory. Use linking words (because, for example, and) and avoid single-word responses like 'Scenario.'

예시: I prefer views in my own country because my hometown has many beautiful places, such as large forests and terraced fields. For example, these landscapes feel peaceful and familiar and remind me of pleasant times working with my family, so I enjoy them more than foreign scenery.

× I like the temperatures, all different views.

✓ I like the different views and the varied atmospheres.

Original sentence uses 'temperatures' incorrectly to mean atmosphere or feeling; vocabulary choice and word order are awkward. Use 'different views' and 'varied atmospheres' for clarity. Improve by choosing correct nouns and linking them with 'and'.

× Different scenery give me different emotions.

✓ Different scenery gives me different emotions.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun treated as singular, so the verb must be 'gives' not 'give'. Ensure subject-verb agreement by identifying whether the subject is singular or plural.

× I think different emotions whenever I see, uh, different kinds of scenario.

✓ I feel different emotions whenever I see different kinds of scenery.

Sentence structure is awkward and uses 'think' incorrectly; 'scenario' is wrong word choice. Use 'feel' to describe emotions and 'scenery' for landscapes. Remove filler and reorder for clarity.

× Uh, for example, if I see green forest, I feel happy like that.

✓ For example, if I see a green forest, I feel happy.

Missing article 'a' before 'green forest' and 'like that' is unnecessary. Use the indefinite article for singular countable nouns and eliminate redundant phrases.

× I prefer views and umm rural areas because I am nature.

✓ I prefer rural views because I love nature.

'I am nature' is incorrect; use 'I love nature'. 'Views and rural areas' is unclear—'rural views' is better. Use conjunctions to create clear noun phrases.

× I like nature so green forest sky, clear sky green scenario make me only feel at home.

✓ I like nature, so green forests and clear skies make me feel at home.

Original has incorrect word forms and order. Use plural 'forests' and 'skies' to sound natural, and place 'feel at home' at sentence end. Remove extraneous words like 'only' unless intended.

× So I will choose upper areas views.

✓ So I would choose views in rural areas.

'Upper areas views' is unclear. Use 'views in rural areas' to match earlier idea. Modal 'would' fits a preference statement; rearrange for natural English.

× Scenario.

✓ Scenery.

Single word 'Scenario' is wrong lexical choice; 'scenery' is the correct noun for landscape views.

× I prefer views in my country because my hometown has a lot of beautiful scenery such as large forests and terrace wise fields.

✓ I prefer views in my country because my hometown has a lot of beautiful scenery, such as large forests and terraced rice fields.

'Terrace wise fields' is incorrect; correct term is 'terraced rice fields' or 'terraced fields'. Add comma before 'such as' and use 'terraced' as adjective.

× Those landscape fee more peaceful and familiar to me and they will remind me of Tai Ho works with my family so I enjoy them more than the scenery I see abroad.

✓ Those landscapes feel more peaceful and familiar to me, and they remind me of times working with my family, so I enjoy them more than the scenery I see abroad.

Multiple errors: 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'; 'fee' is misspelling of 'feel'; tense and phrasing 'will remind me of Tai Ho works' is unclear—likely 'times working with my family'. Use present simple 'remind' for habitual truth and correct word order.